Broken Hope

21/12/12 I wrote this based on the idea that those before us have subscribed to a life of caged ambition because so many of their dreams have met a bitter end, one I never want to meet

The obsolete watched and provoked every shattered window in their way.
Their own,
Their allies and enemies
Panes decayed
Like apples on the front yards path
That paved to common places,
Not beyond.

Pricked a thousand times by replacement mirrors,
Nothing more would fit
But steel bars to blind the stars
As broken hope,
And bleeding promises prevailed.

Our sunsets are clear
Although cracks will appear,
As we rise in the midst of plastic dreams,
And narcissistic nostalgia.

The transfixed troubles of pillars past devise many frames for today,
They struggle with ours,
The stubborn dreamers.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this one definitely rung true to me! i am among the plagued dreamers who are constantly battling between the dream and what is realistic. unfortunately i feel that if this is the case, i will be one of those who in death will plague coming humans with dreams that they struggle with in their life. what would the world be though without the dreamers? maybe it isn't a plague after all but a blessing. i really enjoyed these lines:
"Our sunsets are clear
Although cracks will appear,
As we rise in the midst of plastic dreams,
And narcissistic nostalgia."

something about plastic dreams and narcissistic nostalgia is just too accurate. great use of language! i think this is one of my favorites of yours that i've read :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Once again Dana you have hit the nail on the head! You have a great grasp of the concepts I consider myself with. The important thing is to never consider your dreams impossible. Unless of course, you wish to be Spiderman, anything is within realistic reach.. I suppose we just need to confine ourself temporarily sometimes, to get to where we truly want to be. Thank you again for reading Dana :)

[pasdepoisson]

The replacement mirrors- mass media distracting us from genuine association with past and family?

[Ohhhwillow]

Exactly. Thank you for reading, I'm glad you grasped what I was trying to express!

[Tai Ryens]

Paned dreams, framed perfectly at the time yet now only a decaying reminder of the ambition you haven't taken on, as evident with the cracks. It also appears you see these ambitions as barriers blocking the future, hindering any growth.
Ambitions are quite difficult, as they can take years to achieve . . . They can require the lot of you, yet amount to nothing in the end.. But other times they can be the best things you've ever done

[Ohhhwillow]

You have described perfect.y what I was trying to covey, I couldn't have said it better myself! You don't want to leave these dreams behind and become something you are not, while fulfilling them can be demanding to a point of near impossibility. Thanks Tai, great to hear from you, as always

[Luke L]

hmm very interesting. It is difficult to hold on to said dreams, when you also have to survive and the survival is difficult enough i.e. working a job to support yourself. Though not impossible just difficult.

[Ohhhwillow]

Definitely. Trying to hold onto what you believe in and what you truly want can be hard when there are certain things you HAVE to do, for, as you say survival. Thank you Luke

[Luke L]

you're welcome :)

[B-poet]

A vivid imagery along with complex & intriguing stanza's of profound poetry. Great work. I loved the overall theme you've conveyed here all throughout your poem. :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Bpoet, good to hear from you as always! I'm glad yo enjoyed this! :)

[RainDancer1997]

Lost hopes and dreams can bring anyone down:( But I do agree that I never hope I have to stand in that place of broken dreams. Good job:)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks for reading and processing this piece! :)

[RainDancer1997]

No problem it was really good:)

[Luke Rawlings]

"Broken hope and bleeding promises..." I will stop reviewing everything I can reach now, last one I swear. You are inspirational.

[Ohhhwillow]

Wow, inspirational is the biggest compliment one can receive, thank you Luke, so much!

[Luke Rawlings]

You are most welcome!

[Saumya]

thats very well described and presnted...!!!!!!!!!1 loved it!!!!!!!!!!1

[Lily Mae]

You've left me a little speechless with this.. I feel the power and drive inside your words and it's refreshing. Well penned.. :) xo

[Ohhhwillow]

Refreshing is good, as is speechlessness, thank you Lily, I'm glad you connected with this piece!

[worldchanger5]

aww i love it alot

[Ohhhwillow]

GOOD! :D