Flakey Facade

4/12/12 How do we know who others truly are, if they are falsifying themselves, their thoughts or feelings? We wear a mask for each of the people we meet, sometimes there is no expressing ourselves"

Fallacy is our reality
Page after ashen page,
Yet the rolls of our tongues
And stains of our bleeding pens promote a picture,
That becomes a fixture of the so called truth.

A glorified scripture,
A shameful lie,
An ebony tear without alibi for others in masks can slip down
Like vagrant ice from above.

The stars themselves may have kissed my cheeks,
I know for sure they are tender
But alas not as my front nor snowflakes do they melt.
They remain,
Watching moments immortally.
Bright binds of brass minds that nowhere else connect.

My creaking door presents once more a mother,
Father,
Stranger,
Lover,
A zombie to the world.
To themselves,
From forced self-portraits on their walls
Where lips are upturned as mine,
By a flakey facade.

Author's Note

Been out of touch lately, hope this is not too disappointing

Reviews

[Tarry Franck]

And stains of our bleeding pens promote a picture
By a flakey facade.
Is it still a fake face if we wear it forever?

The poem was great but the just pulled something in me out! Maybe it's time to place my mask down at times. And it's not to hide myself, it to hide my feelings.

You did a wonderful job on this. Don't sell your self short. Bravo

[Ohhhwillow]

I'm sorry what do you mean by "the just pulled something" in you out please explain? :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

An honest poem, stunning wordplays.

My Fave. lines,

A glorified scripture, a shameful lie,

An ebony tear without alibi for others in masks

can slip down like vagrant ice from above.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Marc :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome always :)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Quite descriptive and nice! really liked it

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you!

[sheila.j]

This is far from disappointing. The descriptions and imagery throughout it are great and the last line is a perfect way to end it. Great job :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for your optimism! :D

[Pax]

Fallacy is our reality
~ i find this the best line and much describe all... i think everyone can relate to the poem's context about facade, i guess seems like everyone wears it. The last stanza has great powerful tone that paints a great imagery of facade :By a flakey facade.
Is it still a fake face if we wear it forever? ~ well we wear it from time to time but that deosn't mean its forever, there are moments that we are truly open and vulnerable..... and i think in life nothing last forever, that is why some makes every moment that passed spend it to the fullest... life is short they say...
This is awesome work!
brilliant!

[Ohhhwillow]

I agree, we've all had those beautiful moment with our guard fully down, connecting with another person.. I was trying to provoke thought and your detailed review is reward enough to feel as though this has been achieved so thank you!

[C.C. Marx]

Some people feel the need to be anyone but themselves, why, i will never understand. Pleasing everyone and conforming is not my forte. Fantastic job, thanks for the FR!!

[Ohhhwillow]

Neither will I friend, it certainly makes it difficult to have trust in others, as well as your own judgement. Thank you!

[C.C. Marx]

My pleasure and I agree 100%, is it a wonder I have trust issues with so many people?

[Ohhhwillow]

Not at all, considering how many faces some seem to have.. I suppose with experience comes wisdom - we can only hope to be treated with respect in the mean time!

[C.C. Marx]

Dealing with a certain two faced person right now, one day she's your best friend and the next she hates you. It really depends one who shes with

[Ohhhwillow]

Oh s**t.. Sometimes you just gotta think, is it worth it to stick around!

[C.C. Marx]

Exactly like two days ago we were at a party and she started talking s**t about this girl all me and my friends hate but she was best friends with her as of this year (at the start of school) and everyone thought it was weird and then today she was acting like they are best friends again, it made me sick

[Ohhhwillow]

That's disgusting, just makes you wonder what exactly what they could be saying about you! Hope it sorts itself out!

[C.C. Marx]

Thanks but trust me, if she's saying anything about me, let's just say no one will side with a two-face

[MandaBear]

great job

[Ashly Christen]

I like how this starts, I love the line "the stains of our bleeding pens promote a picture" great piece, much like a masquerade!

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! :)

[RachelReaper]

This poem had everything I think you could look for in a poem. The imagery created beautiful images in your mind throughout the poem, people (everyone) could relate to this in some way or another, your word choice was excellent, and the last line was a powerhouse.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks!

[I, Rene]

this is wonderful @^@

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you!