Paradox Personified

23/11/12 I find writing within myself, can you see me within the writing? Language is beautiful, but it will never really reflect what's in our heads even when used by the most careful tongues

The cruel tragedy is ours,
An undignified declaration of emotion
Surging
- Like the tongue that dances on tomorrow's headline -
Is all we have to offer,
From first breath to fateful death.

This is a shade of the most transparent lake.

My words are not as I desired.
They will never be cryptic cyanide -
Just an empty casket;
A vacant face I can't replace despite it's failure.

My pages become paradox personified.
Behind the ink I hide but still appear,
A distorted trace of truth
Within a blissful fiction.

Author's Note

Short and simple

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Words can never truly convey each and every feeling we have within ourselves, unless someone has lived our exact life, you can empathize and have compassion but never really live among our words. We might linger and dwell in other's sorrows and delights, but we've only really touched upon their essence. I really love this one Willow...excellent!

[Ohhhwillow]

For me it's quite surreal to think of all the memories and thought, feelings we'll never have that others will, and vice versa. Thanks for stopping by Frieda, you've become one of my favourite reviewers!

[Irenic]

nice, its a masterpiece dude

[Irenic]

nice, its a masterpiece dude.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks for reviewing

[B-poet]

Loved the depth & striking truthfulness within your words. You've painted an interesting display of creative written self expression that stands out in a class of it's own. Great Work Willow. An intriguing masterpiece. :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for reading Bpoet, your review means a lot to me! I'm not sure about masterpiece, but I'm glad you related to this one friend :)

[MikeV]

I wish i could put into words what goes on in my mind!
Well written, i enjoyed this. Especially because i can never put into words how all the writing
i read, truly hits me :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Language sometimes feels so redundant, when what goes n in our heads is impossible to depict. Thank you for reading, I'm glad this spoke to you in some way Mike!

[patti]

you write beautifully i have to say, we can never find the right words to convey what our heart really lives... amazing poem!

[Ohhhwillow]

It's true, an eternal burden. Thank you Patti :)

[KeeD]

This was very cool, caught me by surprise to be honest.
"Surging like the tongue that dances on tomorrow's headline
Is all we have to offer,
From first breath to fateful death."
Very creative and intelligently written.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Keegan, I'm glad this caught you by surprise!

[Sir Joseph]

Very interesting rhyme scheme but good write

[Ohhhwillow]

I like to sporadically rhyme, I find it gives it a smooth flow while not falling into a trap where words are used for the sake of rhyming

[Tai Ryens]

Cryptic cyanide, perhaps a shivering reference to a photo that haunts, yet does not? I do say you've a masterpiece here, expressing the neutral apathy of simply not existing. I also just adore the way you reveal the presence of multiple entities in your beginning, whether it be conscience or not. Truly it must be your churning emotions speaking here, and it kills me to say I can relate.
Another thing I certainly enjoyed were the layers you glimpse us through enticing imagery, as with 'a shade of even the most transparent lakes.' I daresay, I've never laid my eyes on another work quite like this, especially with the aspect of intricate structure; revealing the layers of depression, emptiness, and apathy that I've never been able to come to peace with in myself.
Would it be flattering to say you've spoken the emotions I scarcely understand myself? I suppose not.
Flawless work, if not worthy of the eyes of a deity (and that means a lot coming from an agnostic like I).

[Ohhhwillow]

You certainly look deep into the message behind the pieces you read, and that I'm sure makes you a better writer yourself, thank you for that Tai. Often as writers we flow into an idea and later after re-reading our own works can view multiple entities, which is nice, even if subconscious, would you not agree? I started writing as a young girl, which I still am, full of ambiguity with my emotions, writing has helped me to stay sane I must say! I am incredibly flattered by your admiration of this.. I sometimes feel my pieces are weak, thus my confidence is restored, especially from a writer I believe to be great. :) Thank you so much Tai.

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, I feel the same way about my own pieces, and I try to adapt a Sylvia Plath method of satisfying poetry (artisan-like, as in if you can't get a table out of the material, be content with a chair, or even a toy). Your most welcome.

[Gerald Parker]

Our approximations. Discovering truths early in life. A good idea to tackle leading to: 'Behind the ink I hide but still appear.' First line would be better with "A cruel tragedy is ours.'' Watch out for 'its' and 'it's.'

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you for your construction I will be sure to make these edits