Vanished Puddle

25/7/12 The people in our lives come and go and it's hard to know where intentions lie, sometimes you have to let them go like fallen flowers in the wind, sometimes they stick around

At dawn they bounce.
Translucent,
Vitreous like fractured glass from the sky.
Laced in sublimity,
These beads we cannot hold but shelter from for comfort
Fall and fade away,
As companions past and yet to follow.

Once Messiahs gift;
An aid of an ear.
Now forgetting to hear
As He has His children below,
On their knees.

Softer than silk touch of fingers parting,
And descending smiles in summers breeze,
That gentle blade of empathy in ravens veins
Stabs sweeter with compassion.
That cut, serene as its installers first intention is temporary.
It's removal rips like stitches on their unkept lips,
Through flesh caressed it tears.

And then there is relief,
From the departed who fell like death without His wings,
Another scar,
Another drop in a vanished puddle.

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this whole piece seemed to reflect of bitterness, insignificance and a feeling of being invisible. the pain here was tangible and your images here are lovely! i particularly enjoyed these lines:
"Softer than silk touch of fingers parting,
And descending smiles in summers breeze,
That gentle blade of empathy in ravens veins
Stabs sweeter with compassion."
i absolutely love the image of the raven and how you pull it through. great work here!

[Ohhhwillow]

I definitely wrote this during a feeling of great pain, and while it is all in the past, I'm glad the intensity of my melancholy is clear, and still enjoying to my readers, that is great to hear! Thank you Dana, your reviews are always far too kind!

[pasdepoisson]

I think the most devastating lines are:
Once Messiahs gift;
An aid of an ear.
Now forgetting to hear
As He has His children below,
On their knees.

Sort of a "Why hast thou forsaken me?" moment? Or is it that this Messiah leaves the limbo-bound to attend to his flock? Poignant stuff.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! I know it may be a bit abstract but the idea was of friendship and the feeling of abandonment and betrayal I can imagine the faithful feel when in dire times their God is nowhere to be seen. I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for reviewing! :)

[Kashif Waqas Ramay]

Softer than silk touch of fingers parting,
And descending smiles in summers breeze,
That gentle blade of empathy in ravens veins
Stabs sweeter with compassion.
That cut, serene as its installers first intention is temporary.
It's removal rips like stitches on their unkept lips,
Through flesh caressed it tears.

fabulous lines...

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you Kashif. :)

[Frieda P]

Your words wrap around this concept as though a lovely hymn. It brings to mind that quote about people coming into our lives for a reason, a season or a lifetime, although you wrote it much more eloquently.

That gentle blade of empathy in ravens veins
Stabs sweeter with compassion.

Adore that line, and your title 'vanished puddles' says it all. Excellent read Willow!

[Ohhhwillow]

Fortunately I am blessed with good friends, however we've all be hurt by them at some point! They most definitely do come and go in our lives, perhaps for the best. Thank. You for reading Frieda and I'm so glad you liked it! :)

[Tai Ryens]

The mention of the deity seems more symbolic than literal; either that or a stab at the faith? My brain tingles with enticement; so many aspects to consider, and I can hardly scratch the surface!
Bookmarking for future reference; well done.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks Tai, it's a privilege to be of your interest! :) The mention of diety is a stab at faith yes, I have nothing against religion however I see its often bloody interpretations and I find it impossible to believe!

[Tai Ryens]

I just love your ending! It supports your perspective greatly.
I, too, find myself in disgust of the rather bloodier pages of religion, although I'm very find of Buddhism given that it's actually, how to put, plausible as a belief. I suppose I respect the right to belief, but I hardly respect the religion.

[Luke Rawlings]

I learned a new word today thanks to this! Vitreous! A lovely piece and truly compelling. Well done! :D

[Ohhhwillow]

Haha yuss, expanding the vocab of my readers! Fantastic! :D Thank you Luke!

[quinfinn]

one thing i adore about Willow is.....no matter what the topic of your write is, you always master the effect it has on the reader with extreme skill and wonderfully expressed magnificence...you have a true gift, and it shines wherever you write. this is sublime!

[Ohhhwillow]

I wrote this piece a year ago actually, thank you Quin you're too kind! I'm glad you enjoyed this :)

[C.C. Marx]

You can never tell peoples intentions, when it comes to staying or going, all you can do is take them along for the ride and wait to see whether they get off. Great poem!!

[Ohhhwillow]

A leap of faith, but indeed one always worth taking on the journey of finding great companionship! Thank you C.C!

[C.C. Marx]

My pleasure, great read :)

[mikl paul]

your language is maturing so much in your poems. i'm so excited to follow you for years.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thank you! Certainly put a smile on my face, it means a lot that you wish to carry on reading them. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

And then relief, from the departed who fell like death without his wings, Another scar, another drop in a vanished puddle." That's brilliant.

[Ohhhwillow]

Thanks!!! :)