Poison

A class project where I was to mimic a poem's intonation but make my own words. I based this off of Sylvia Plath's The Mirror.

I am cylinder and tiny. I cannot have any flaws.

Whatever I touch, I pierce immediately.

But not with harm, only to prick the surface of skin.

I do not destroy, only prevent-

The negotiator of flaws, needle point.

Generally I remain tucked away in a closed drawer

It is dark, and cramped. Within it I remain sterile

To not damage the one I touch. But I change.

Plastic is removed to let me do my work.

 

Now I am poison. I have a job to fulfill.

To prevent the natural process of death.

Women come to me to escape their fear of aging.

I see their pain, and advertise my power.

They come to me with an eager approach and anxiety.

I am absolute to them. They always come.

Everyday I infect another woman to ease her.

Through me they have killed their year, and caused a cycle of pain

Working inside them day by day, like a bad addiction.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend Chloe,
A topic I would never have thought to embrace, kudos to you! I think it is tragic that European culture has pushed the concept that the aging of women is not a positive. This pushes many women to do all kinds of things, many unhealthy in their struggle for that youthful look.
I think men are the biggest instigators of this issue, as many seek the younger looking women to boost their egos. I think this is a grievous sin that should hold a special, hotter than normal place in hell for those whom make older women feel that they are less than as they age. And our media is constantly pushing products aimed towards that youthful look. Of course this compounds the problem.
I love the cultures that have not fallen into this trap and view ageing as a positive. True beauty lies inside as I have written in my poem “Behind the Eyes”. Thank you for this poem that I believe shines a spotlight on the insidious addiction!

Blessings, Laughing-Bear

[Calypso]

You done her well!

[Sunni Davis]

I really like the first person voice of this poem. It pulls me in and creates a very nice visual for this powerfuly crafted piece. Terrific job, dear!

[Lily Mae]

This is a great write.. most excellent...x

[Sri Gawn Tu Fahr]

WOW!!!! piercing and powerful,yet so tender.I loved it.