Hell

Tempting the demon

Amongst the fallen brethren.

Beckon a finger and she comes willingly

 

“Come my little one…”

 

Evil is seduction to the consenting

Chewing skin in contemplation

Shadows mirror eyes of lusting flesh

 

Laced digits, mingled breath, slick skin

Hell in its purest form, merging with insanity

Molding and arching, human form reaches peak

 

“Say it. Say it now. I want to hear it.”

 

Whimpers emit as the demon smirks

A finger is beckoned

And she comes willingly

 

Author's Note

Comment as you please.

Reviews

[Aurora Lynn]

I don't believe that this poem should be rated Mature, because I found most of the content fine for most teenagers. This poem was very well written, and I really enjoyed reading it. I especially love the lines 'Tempting the demon/Amongst the fallen brethren./Beckon a finger and she comes willingly' The poem flowed beautifully and I throughouhly enjoyed it! Thank you for writing this and entering this in my contest!
~Aurora Lynn, from 'In Too Deep'

[Calypso]

Well written.

[Layla J Omorose]

I always love a poem about internal struggle or seduction by evil temptations and this poem does an excellent job of combining the two...great job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and story made the poem come alive. Made me think this morning. The temptation of good and bad is daily. I tell people. Know the end to the action. We will pay for all sins and good deeds one day. I like the ending. You have create a excellent poem.
Coyote

[E.V. Black]

Wow. I went back and read some of the lines over again. I do believe you placed a double entendre (sp?) within these lines. The second interpretation of the lines is seductive and very suggestive. I love the way you incorporated both interpretations.
Definitely a favorite.

[quinfinn]

this one leaves me conflicted about whether to be frightened or beguiled, but i sense this was your message all along. extraordinary poem. very impressive.

[Jess Holden]

Such beautiful writing and imagry :)

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

loved this..very well done! (:

[Sunni Davis]

Very good descritpion of what hell is. Its almost seductive in its evil and your poem reflects that very well.