Lavender smells

Lavender smells touch my nose

the familiar aroma brings back fond thoughts

as I pull the sheets to my chin

day dreaming for a second

then like a bolt of lightning 

popping up out of the bed

She's here

somewhere near 

I want to dash from room to room

but with a thudding heart

and litefeet

I float through the house 

calling her name

Shes left a trail of smells 

for me to follow and find her

we've played this game before

she leaves her favorite flower

and i follow it until i can't follow 

anymore

At last I see her

her bright eyes just gleam

at the simple sight of me

and for a second

I realize

that she plays this game for her

just as much as for I...

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Another gem!! So solemn, so profound, and so compelling! Wonderful! Again, you have some technicalities you need to address:

-"daydreaming" is one word.
- I think you're wanting to say "light feet" (I have no idea what "litefeet" is)
-"just as much as for ME" ("for I" is grammatically incorrect.....and here especially it doesn't sound particularly good, so I wouldn't advise declaring poetic license on it).

Other than that, this, I repeat, is amazing! Absolutely fantastic! Well done!

[Alexa Nichols]

Have you ever considered a poetry book? You'd sell! :-)

[OhSnapShley]

I totally would!

[JLily98]

I didn't really know what to expect when looking at the title, but I was not one bit disappointed. Good choice by writing it in a lavender color, it creates this sort of innocence to the poem. Keep it up

[dipsy]

Hide nd seek kind of game following the lavender smell..

[Poetic Beauty]

Love the feel of this poem. The cat and mouse game of following lavender scent.

[apennylate]

Hmm... A playful write with wisps of agony throughout... Is the game one of pain, or endless enthusiasm... Gleamingly penned...

[OhSnapShley]

I did indeed leave that idea up for the reader to determine. Glad you liked this one as well. Thanks again!

[apennylate]

No problem

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I love how your words match with the font colour and the image too. Beautiful imagery in this write. :)

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks YumnaKay!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, OSS! 😊

[WoodenChair]

Love the colour, it's like a violet, not quite purple but a little pinkish hint of yellow!

What a great colour

[OhSnapShley]

It really is a great one! Thanks always for reading and reviewing.

[mercy party]

i like the purple as it was effective with the poem in bringing me back to being a little kid running around that back yard in summer hiding behind the clotheslines. a beautiful poem.

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks so much for your kind words and the review. Its always nice to go back to those times.

[Ethan]

You know this is very nice, but I would consider changing the title to something like "lavender scent." "Lavender smells" sounds a bit agrarian and frankly, the title makes it seem as though the poet doesn't like lavender. Overall, nicely done.

[OhSnapShley]

While I value your opinion I think I will keep the name as it is. While the title may be misleading, the poem explains his love for the smell. Thanks for reading and reviewing :)