Cherish

Cherish everything.

I am not of such a childish mind
That I believe in things that can't be done
Like holding all the moons and stars
Like swallowing the sun.

And I do not believe that love
Can be controlled or understood
Because you don't truly love me
Though you promised that you could.

I'm not so naive to think
That I won't lose this game,
And that just like many others
Our story ends the same.

But though I know the end
Of our dance is drawing near
I will hold onto you and cherish
Every moment that you're here. 

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Odrah, I hadn't read you in awhile, this was fantastic!

Now since when can we not swallow the sun???

:)

Wonderful write!
Antonio xx

[azlamalo]

awesome. you put this together so well,, I absolutely love it

[Kayla]

I like is this alot!! Very good imagery!!

[Naomi Montana Walsh]

I like this because after all is said and done.. we must take moments and cherish them as they come .. they may go as well.. but still what is ..now is worth something .. and to cherish it is not a bad thing at all.

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Beautiful we do have to cherish every moment that we are here and cherish those we love, very well done and nice to meet you

[The Raven King]

Unlike some of the other reviewers of this poem, I do not find it sad in the least. I see it as an complete acceptance of life. Embracing the inevitable. This is a poem celebrating life and teaching that even the knowledge of failure cannot diffuse the happiness of the moment in a mind that fully understands life. Excellent poem!

[bob, small b. aka invs]

beautifully written, though i find it sad. it reminded me of an old song written by Buffy St. Marie called Until It's Time For You To Go.

[JohnL]

From the first line, this poem creates an atmosphere of calm and peace - and this, despite the fact that the subject is a sad one.
Your telling of the tale is clearly understandable, and your use of simile (V1) and metaphor (V4) clear, though restrained and creates wonderfully formed and meaningful poetry out of sadness.

John

[jessfoundwonder]

a really nice poem.
easy to read, and i'm sure everyone can relate to it.
i give you props (:

[Orlando Murcia]

What a beautiful poem
And it is true we should
cherish those who are around us
because we don't know how long we
will have them for

Great write!!

Orlando M