Child.

Crushed, once again.

 

I’m walking in daze.

I’m reciting my name.

Over and over. Just to make sure I remember.

 

Do you remember?

Do you remember?

 

Well, here I go again.

Cast out like a snake.

Bitten in the chest.

Sucked out like a straw.

 

You’re a child.

With your child eyes and your child hands.

And your child mind.

It’s just too much for you to understand.

 

I’m stumbling over just how to waste my time.

Begging the second hand to run a little faster.

Dance in circles around the numbers.

Trying to fade the pain.

 

With anything.

 

Anything that will keep me sane.

 

Anything that will keep me from dialing your telephone.

Knocking on your door.

Or worst, crying over you.

 

God, Child, I’m dying over you.

 

Because you are just a child.

With your child eyes and your child hands.

Your child mind.

I was too much for you to understand.

 

Your warmth is too cold to bear.

And your eyes. You have a new, demon stare.

 

I’m walking in a haze.

Repeating my name in daze.

Trying to blow out the love you gave.

Looking for someone to save.

 

Reviews

[Raef C. Boylan]

Any chance that the photo is of you as a kid? It's a cool and cute pic.

The devestation felt by the narrator is very clear throughout this piece. You've done great work with the narrative voice; it's very 'real' and directly appealing.

"God, Child, I'm dying over you."

"Well, here I go again.
Cast out like a snake.
Bitten in the chest.
Sucked out like a straw." - some great comparisons here.

I like how you managed to stay kind of objective; he didn't have enough maturity to understand what our narrator was about. It gets the reader wondering about what situations must have arisen to demonstrate this.

Overall, a good, raw poem.
Thanks for sharing it.
I hope it helped a little?

[Leah Maldonado]

oh my god. this is beautiful.
so beautiful.
You just put a stream of thought on a piece of computer screen.
beautiful
Leah

[Glee]

Touching write. The child I suppose is used as a analogy to refer to a person with a childlike attitude. Tell them to "Grow up". Sounds like a boyfriend who was a bit younger than you were, or perhaps the same age. A woman always needs an older figure to look up to I suppose.

[An owl on the moon]

An amazing balance of innocence and maturity, ignorance and understanding, pain and joy... You capture and image so vividly, and captivate us with your observance and depth! So well done!!!

[Lady Tyke]

This really broke through to my heart. Theres such an urgency in the narrative. The picture you've chosen is perfect, it reflects a child's innocence and wonder but digs up a certain sadness. Wonderful read, thank you.