Your Life

Your Life

There’s a boy down there

Hears all about you’re expedition

Holds close to prayer;

In hopes for days without your repetition

 

It’s a curse, the worst

And he, will never understand this

Adverse, rehearsed   

On knees in constant guilt, steady reminisces

 

It’s no lie, your life

Is what it’s all about

You’re bi, your knife

You’ve cut in crosses, in hopes to bleed it out

 

There’s no revolution, no solution

For the stains in your eyes

No cure, no sight

Secure enough, to guide you in your prayers tonight

 

There’s no peace, no feast until you get to grip

This trip, you’ll slip

In cracks you lack;

Cement to hold it back

 

But I’m queer; like you, with my stained blue eyes

Stuck, stalled in cells like you- with this advice

In underestimation, retaliation;

Cold high, in my beliefs tonight

 

So stay bright, stay light

This Night

...and let these dreams rewrite.

Your Life

Written by; Octob3r Star

Session V: Damaged

 

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

Floored... Exceptional Write! Stepping outside of ones self to permeate another reality you cover like DuPont the many shady colors masked in dark font that there are no Straight lines ;) and everyone's navigation to deviation. Beautifully written like the pro you are! Lyrically I'm green like the matrix!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. Felt like a good story from someone remembering a celebration and happiness. I like the desire and honest feel of this poem. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

"So stay bright, stay light
This Night
...and let these dreams rewrite."

beautiful ending verse!

[Ruth]

Excellent hon! The shadow self has to play at times and be honest, brutally so, we are who we are, let it flow! ♥

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice. I like the flow and the thought process here. This is a great book man. Keep it up!!

[Leslie Philibert]

Enjoyed this a lot, not only due to the excellent thoughts, but also due to the good way it is written, the good use of commas,the internal rhymes like bright and light, and the use of a three line verse at the end. Good thoughts, and written with technical skill, good work.

[Honey54]

wow...I felt you bared alot in this piece...im going to read ahead to get maybe a better understanding...thankyou

[Emerald Seas]

There is such a sadness to this piece, and I hesitate because I feel there can be many interpretations to the writing such as molestation, guilt/shame over sexual orientation, combination of those elements, a religious figure also perhaps that has done wrong.
The last few lines are hopeful yet, the words before lend a darkness to the ending
"So stay bright, stay light
This Night
...and let these dreams rewrite."

Well written, with much to ponder by the reader.