[Ink Lightning]

Ah, haikus. My old friend.

These ink bleeding pens,

Drip out words from her pained mind.

reveal her scarred heart.

 

~

 

She screams for some help.

Won't anybody be there??

She just needs realy love.

Reviews

[Fabric Pulse]

"Ink bleeding pens..." I love that line because it's so real.

[Allen Smuckler]

Both haikus are excellent...expressive, heartfelt and passionate... two suggestions:
1st poem I might add semi colon instead of period.
2nd poem...I would switch to say "She just really needs love"...
really is misspelled...
also, should title second poem and separate from 1st...
Not trying to sound too critical, because they are both great writes.
allen