[Sunset Worth]

Yup...

The sunshine and happiness,

covers up all the pain on the Earth.

But even in the hurt and hoplessness,

I'll show my worth.

She needs to hear,

my story, so she will live.

It's not very important,

but it's all I have to give.

Author's Note

Constructed Cristizm.

Reviews

[☯]

Very deep and beautiful. Hope pinned down, and warmness filled me up. Great job! :)

[roy mccarthy]

great poem!

[Fabric Pulse]

B-e-a-u-t-i-f-u-l. The only thing I can say resembling going against my liking your poems so far from what I've seen is that they're a bit too short perhaps, like there's so much more you still have to say while in one posting, keep telling the story, don't be afraid, let loose in the rhymes, show all of you good or bad, it's real, and you have to be real and alive to be heard. True, poems can be as long or as short as you want them to be, it's your writing and you at the end of the day with the pen in your hand know with a feel for how it's supposed to be, but I personally feel like you can only benefit by expanding on the lengths of your poems, at least some of them anyway.