The Truth Behind Life

I wait till the sun rises
I wait till the sun drops.
I wait till I have forgotten that I have waited too far;

I feel the emptiness that surrounds me 
I feel the bitterness of the wind,
I feel the hatred of my foes
And the sting of their fake vows;

I try to make things right
I try to make ends meet;
I try to give my best but
It seems to drift away from me;

I keep thinking whether the decisions I make 
And the promises I keep 
Are right or not;
But the more i think, the more i seem 
to lose myself in this depth of curiosity...

Author's Note

I Hope you like it :)

Reviews

[CecilA]

Dipannita,

I love it. Good job.

Question: would you consider the following change?

'I wait until I have forgotten that I have waited too long.'

Otherwise, I wouldn't change a thing.

This doesn't mean that what you have written is wrong; just my thoughts.

[Dipannita M]

Thank you Cecil for your feedback and yes I will change it once my exams are over and I get some free time. I'll also post some of my other poems and would love a feedback for those too.... :)

[CecilA]

I understand the need for FREE time; I'm behind with my story. Hopefully I'll get it reposted next week. I hope all goes well with your exams; I'm certain you'll do fine. Have a great day,

Cecil

[Dipannita M]

Thanks :) I hope you finish your story soon!

[Pradeep Nair]

I feel the emptiness that surrounds me
I feel the bitterness of the wind,
I feel the hatred of my foes
And the sting of their fake vows;

- As sweet as Nectar...
I haven't seen much of such flow...
Keep going...

[Dipannita M]

Thank you so much! Really means a lot :) I'll try to post more after my exams get over :)

[PurpleQuartz]

A great poem! There's a large depth to it.

[Dipannita M]

Thanks so much! Means a lot :)