Jewish mythology includes the story of the hoyl—a bird that, like the phoenix, is devoured by divine fire only to rise from its own ashes. Legend says that after Adam and Eve ate the forbidden fruit in the Garden of Eden, Adam offered the fruit to all of the animals. The hoyl bird was the only one that refused to eat the fruit that God had said must never be eaten. As a reward, the hoyl received a kind of immortality. It never dies but only goes to sleep, after which fire destroys it. An egg remains, however, and from that egg a full-grown hoyl hatches anew.
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Ah, thank you for the author's note. I was a bit lost on the 'hoyl' thing. I researched it and it only returned reference to musicians and such (people with that name).
Well, with the definition renewed under the given definition I would definitely venture far enough to say that this is an exquisite work.
A tale of decline, lovely, lovely.
100/100
This is truly a beautifull piece, I can see why it took first place in the contest of skilled poets. Very well thought out and very discriptive, plus the old language fits it perfectly of course! This will go into my favs...!
Graceful poem and it amuses me that you know your mythology, adding an entire story in one poem.
The hoyl is a representation of resistance against temptation. That only those strong enough to ignore it are rewarded with the greatest gift of all: life. :)
Not bad at all, and your knowledge of the subject definitely enhances it. It just feels a bit... I don't know... Artificial. A bit too forced, if you will. It seems many of the words are only there to make the poem seem more sophisticated. Honestly, I feel like it could have been a better poem without many of the more exotic examples. Not bad, just a bit to contrived for my tastes. Keep it up.
This is expressing so much, so elegantly. Each line attaching itself to the next, almost without effort, but I'm sure there was a lot of that and care for this piece. What a great concept, attached to a more grounded story, that I've never heard before. So much good stuff!