Many Moons Later

Of all cosmic wastes

And divine entities

I catch your thoughts

And listen not to 

Spellbound notions

Of tropic nightly fancy

But to doubt.

Time is our supernova. 

A spark in a shroud 

Of shattered glass. 

Burn for a sunny second

Then collapse.

Your hand is but a 

Star on earth, to the sky.

And fingers atoms to 

The breathing horizon. 

They are my universe. 

And yet, as many moons ago

They lose grip.

And my Saturn eyes freeze. 

Reviews

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Really Lovely writing!
Keep it up!
Do you read mine too Anguish and She..
God bless you..
Lucky!

[J Todd Underhill]

Quite an interesting read, I enjoyed it and shall be returing to read more work!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow, brilliant imagery you've shown! I love the use of metaphors! Definately enjoyed reading this.
Wonderful write! I loved it!

[RAWR!]

:)
i like the images i saw in my head.
this poem was cool.

thanks for sharing!

[Caradoc]

Great imagery and nice use of metaphor. I think my favorite line is "tropic nightly fancy". To me it really captures how things many humans think, say and do are merely copies and regurgitations of things long since done. They are history repeating itself.

Thanks for a nice poem. I wonder who made your Saturn eyes freeze? Or did I misunderstand?

[Que]

Really great poem, I loved it!

[Luke Ritta]

I really enjoyed this!!

[Kaitlynn A. Black]

Wow! I really really like this! :D It's amazing how you can capture such vivid imagery with so few words!

Kaitlynn =)

[Omar Fendri]

Voila, la création poétique... Poetry should be the terrestrial mirror of the Deity which is reflected by the colors, the sounds and the rhythms... by all the beauties of the universe. And here I am finding that misplaced mirror, lingering inside your breathtaking words... Such an outstanding choice for the natural and terrestrial vocabulary. The description is utterly well-written provided with an inspirational imaginary...
"And fingers atoms to
The breathing horizon.
They are my universe. " ADORABLY PERFECT...
DIRECTLY, IN MY FAVORITE LIST.

[nicolo]

"Burn for a sunny second" -I find this line Cute and Funny. :)
"And my Saturn eyes freeze. " -I also froze after this last line.

Very Creative in using the heavenly bodies :)