Green For You

The focus in this poem is how the speaker alters the important things in her life to this guy's favourite colour, green.

Hunter green dress

Will trail amongst 

Marble hearts

And candle fire. 

Pull in, 

To expand out

To you.

Colour me in 

How you want. 

Touch these

Ivy trellises.

Before they coil

My throat

Like smothered kisses.

Start again.

It’s apple green

On bruised, afflicted

Walls and memories.

You insist. 

I must comply.

It was blue.

Soft ice of 

Summer green

Was always better, though.

Clear as a drop

On morning leaves.

Never see

The closeness 

Colour brings. 

Fire on floral.

Coquelicot on forest.

Your favourite

Crisps the edge

Of ferns new-born.

Hollows the bark

Until dark with

Bitter burns.

No drops 

Of broken ocean

To soothe.

No blue 

To divide calm

And the storm. 

My amber

Rips my flesh

And no emerald

Will be my prince.

Reviews

[Plagued Monumentally]

I read this and didn't know how to review it in a way nobody else did on this poem. I loved the way you captured the love of this poem in a way that I haven't seen it captured in anyone else's poems. I think that the way you made the girl (I don't know if you're speaking from personal experience or not) change everything just for the guy's favorite color. It shows pure devotion and real love between the two, and it made me think about my romance views a little bit. This was a whole new world of love, and I was just glad I could explore it.

Good use of imaginary, and keep on writing, I can't wait to review and read more of your beautiful work.

[Enigma]

This piece was enlightening. I loved the word choice and the images ir brought to mind.- Very nice.

[amdc101]

Great imagery, word choice, and focus. It was great.

[Jeremy Baker]

The green motif and your descriptive language are very good. The imagery is vivid and I love how the reader can make their own associations with the colours. Great writing!

[roy mccarthy]

awesome write,
great imagery for such short lines!

[Richard Williams]

Fine imagery with well combined phrases. The coiling the throat in smothered kisses is vivid and imaginative.

[Brittni]

You hear of so many ways a girl would change themselves for a guy, but to go and change everything just for his favorite color? I think this is showing loyalty in a new light. It's a breath of fresh air and I think a stroke of genius. Excellent read!

[Robin]

your story is told well against this verdant backdrop of green in the seasons of love

perfect ending

[Uc Amalu Jr]

Yeah, venompen, I'll support you with the imaging & symbolism. . I also like the submission by the girl just for a colour. .the rhymes are wonderful too. . Good work

[Venompen]

Wow. Beautiful imagery and clear symbolism. It paints a picture of a relationship doomed to fail, and its slow collapse. The woman keeps trying to change to the man's ideal, but its just fake for both of them. Magnificent!

[ShadowOfTheDay]

Amazing imagery! Beautiful poem.