No Cherry Blossoms Here

Enigma.

Trees conceal your shadows, your life,

Your whispered breath. Like you, there for 

An instant, gone forever. 

Body fleeing, but your soul staining

My cherry blossom.

Flutter, caress the wind, 

But not my face. Float through the world

With no reason, thought, rhyme,

But settle before the last chime. 

Starlight. Help me find his face,

Reveal what he won't. Throw light

On the unlightable. Don't let me talk 

To the shadows anymore. 

Catch his breath like a bird, can't 

Fly away. My petal lips take his breath now.

Grace little of his mouth, then he's whisked,

Back into the dark, with you, with me, 

Nestled in the night, 

And no cherry blossoms in sight. 

Reviews

[nonno noo]

You've done exceptionally with this piece, and by no means am i surprised. you have this innate ability to paint such concise images of deep subjects. and in addition to your gift for detailed language and deep internal expression, you present your thoughts in a visually pleasing aesthetic. keep it up, you're great.

[Jeremy Baker]

Beautiful imagery and descriptions. I love the message in this poem.

[Akshat♥]

Imagery is so awesome here..
you made me think..
this is different:)

[N. N. Grainger]

I'm glad you've added me on here I was becoming a little disenchanted with some of the content on this site but I feel happy have found a writer whose writing I can just sit back and read and allow myself to relax and be taken away somewhere beautiful. I love the delicate yet lively floral lexis; it's a real spirit-lifter.

In terms of criticism, I am trying to find something to try to help you progress but I honestly think you're above me on this one and that there's nothing I have to offer you.

[Brittany Lavy]

This is a really good poem. I loved all the imagery I got from it and the way it flowed. Very, very well done. I was truely captured in it's depth. Amazing job :)

[~Anita Sandlin~]

You have done great with this poem with all the wonderful visuals..good job

[The old me]

awesome read, very good poem

such a longing, i can feel this. Enjoyable read!