No Cherry Blossoms Here

Enigma.

Trees conceal your shadows, your life,

Your whispered breath. Like you, there for 

An instant, gone forever. 

Body fleeing, but your soul staining

My cherry blossom.

Flutter, caress the wind, 

But not my face. Float through the world

With no reason, thought, rhyme,

But settle before the last chime. 

Starlight. Help me find his face,

Reveal what he won't. Throw light

On the unlightable. Don't let me talk 

To the shadows anymore. 

Catch his breath like a bird, can't 

Fly away. My petal lips take his breath now.

Grace little of his mouth, then he's whisked,

Back into the dark, with you, with me, 

Nestled in the night, 

And no cherry blossoms in sight. 

Reviews

[nonno noo]

You've done exceptionally with this piece, and by no means am i surprised. you have this innate ability to paint such concise images of deep subjects. and in addition to your gift for detailed language and deep internal expression, you present your thoughts in a visually pleasing aesthetic. keep it up, you're great.

[Aarontastic]

For me, great poetry is always read with a sigh, and I found myself doing that with this piece. I admire its delicacy, symbolized by the cherry blossoms, and reflected further in the crisp and light verses that make up the poem. Every line is good and integral to the whole; there's no filler here. The story it told was somber and sweet--to me at least, but it's open to interpretation. You awarded it the tearjerker award, so I was expecting a dirge XD

Anyways, you've done another good job, I love the restraint and perfect phrasing in your work.

[Richard Williams]

Good combinations here, with the references to nature, the cherry blossoms and the weave of emotion, nice job.

[Lizzie_Madrid]

That was really good! You help me see what is going on because you pretty much take us there! Never stop what you are doing! EVER!

[Tasha]

This was a beautiful poem You painted such vivid pictures for a deep subject. Great write.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

To me this is the story of A girl who has lost a guy they were or wanted to be in a realationship with and she is remembering time sepnt with him or daydreaming about what could have been. but in the end its all in her head because this guy has died.

[Michael of Gilead]

This feels sad, melancholy....a want not granted....a need not meet

[Uc Amalu Jr]

Wonderful!
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[Veritatis Cupitor]

"Starlight. Help me find his face,
Reveal what he won't."
FAVORITE LINE .

nice word choice and fluidity... really good work here. :)

[CT]

Very nice. Very nice, indeed. The poem has certain... I dunno, feel, about it that I find both emotionally stimulating and subtly sad. The best thing I could compare it to would be the soft cry of a bird in the night, absolutely beautiful but undeniably sad. A very good piece. Keep up the good work.

[.quan.011.]

This is a beautiful poem. Sorry it's so short I am really not good at reviewing poem.