It

dunno where this came from....I actually scared myself.

 

Crows cawed while bats still flew

awakening the dogs into a weary cry

sending the cat to reach its highest pitch

as it looked at me with beaming eyes glowing green

from the itch of wanting its claws

dig into anything that would satisfy

its need to cling for life,

as death beckoned this cloudy night

which blocked the moon and any star

who’d dare shine a ray of hope

onto this Earth so doomed!

The wind hummed in alto

through ominous trees moving

in a painted, ritual dance

preparing for what is to come…

Unknown to them

Unknown to us

yet to its force we are all magnets,

pulled towards it in fear

and out of sync we balance

our last thoughts of what is real

before we fall

One by One

into its nest which does not breed.

I know I’m falling

I see you falling

Whose fall shall it break first?

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Id normally not write on a subject like this...so it was my own challenge...(still biting nails)

Reviews

[Kevin Vorshak]

This poem grabbed me right away and made me want to stay all the way through it. Your portrayal of death as a magnet we are all eventually drawn to, regardless of creature, hits home. O!, if you were going for creepy, you did well with this one.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

You succeeded in writing a well paced poem that hekl my interest till the last fall.

Sal

[Emily B]

ooooh . . . Fall is coming quick. You've just set the mood.

[BrightEyes]

oh my - rather a dark write - I do these sorts of writes fairly often - and I loved the last line of this - somehow it makes the entire piece a little more sinister - a bit more frightening.

laura

[Legion]

Wow. That is very dark and dismal. Definetly different and I like it. Especially the question at the end. Good thing I got wings to stop my fall. :) Good work.

[bluessadmood]

hey you were just funny and naughty ,why the change all of a sudden ,its like you are telling us how judgement day is going to be,or whats it like when we go to hell ha ha ,its a very dark picture you are pulling on here,but its captivating all in all ,like how it feels on Dooms Day

[Samuel Dickens]

Yikes! It is a bit scary with all those signs of gloom and doom.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Hey girl you went a little dark and evil here, wow the mystery and attraction to the unknown... I like this side of you.