First kiss

My FIRST Greco-Roman Palindrome. This one was also here before it was wiped out. For my new friends. At some point (after goosebumps)..the sentences reverse word for word (still making sense)....thats a palindrome.

 

 

Did she kiss him?…..yet?!

Pounding heart

Pursed lips, twitching fingers,

Sweaty palms and brow.

Was she scared?

<<Sighs>>…“Could I?.....if only……;

Like ice, cold and numbing thoughts screaming - Inadmissible!

She felt punished, cursed, hexed, hypnotised!!

Feared rejection!

Nearby, was truth!

Separated, only inches,

(Goosebumps)

Inches only separated,

Truth was nearby!

Rejection feared…

Hypnotised, hexed, cursed, punished she felt!

 ‘Inadmissible screaming thoughts’, numbing and cold, ice-like;

“If only I could”…sighs…!

Scared she was,

Brow and palms, sweaty

Fingers twitching, lips pursed,

Heart pounding

Yet, him KiSS, she DID!

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[distefano 401]

wow, this took me back. i liked the use of palindromes; i'm familiar with them, but i've never really read a whole poem with them. they worked for you.

[Artur]

like a gentle touch of dream - your words are light as air on summer night
perfect
thankyou for sharing with us

[He@ther!]

Wow!!!!:) This is soooo cool!!!:) Not only does the piece have a sweet, romantic concept, the words are also beautiful:)
Very well done, and I think that writing a palindrome sounds fun:) This is the first one I've ever seen and its brilliant!!!!:)
Thanx for sharing such a great piece with everyone:)

-Heather

[bluessadmood]

oh you turned such wonderful love showing into a real drama ,i sensed her tension all the way and i can understand ,love tumbles all our lives upside down ,oh the way you describe it ,so beautifully ,really i just loved the way you showed all these feelings,wonderful...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Wow you really put all those mixed emotions and fear of a first kiss into this fast paced heart pounding write... very well done.

[Windy]

Very interesting write. I believe this is the first "palindrome" I have ever read, and it was really neat. I doubt I could ever do it, I 'd probably drive myself crazy trying to be sure when it was turned around it would still make sence. A wonderful work of "art" I'd say. Well done, Congrats. :)

[Legion]

That was pretty clever. Now can you do one standing on your head? :) I really liked this. Something cool and the poem itself was good as well.

[eric mccarthy]

i've never read anything like this before...i liked it. very much. oh, yes. writing something like this would probably give me a headache.

[Samuel Dickens]

This must have been hard to write! What a challenge, and you pulled it off with "colors flying"! (note the reversal, hehe) It ended with a kiss, so I'd call that a happy ending. A great job, O!