A Not so happy Ending

This book is quiet finished yet, any pointers or tips would be greatly appreciated.

This story is not quiet finished yet. I am just looking for pointer, tips, and ideas for upcoming events in the story. Enjoy!!!! Please leave reviews.

No one clearly understood this dystopian world as well as Achilles Mutilus.His dark brown hair was combed over like a proper boy. His emerald green eyes cursed this forest community that he and his family live in.His usual outfit of choice was his white button-up with his black bow tie, he wore three ear piercings along his ears. His skull and crossbones bracelet was covered most of the time by his shirt.

In this world if you disobeyed once or did something wrong you would either be tortured or killed. Forms of torture and killings varied. The most dishonorable death was to be burned, this meant you dishonored your name. Though he was good at keeping himself from trouble that was all about to change when he met her.

Caedicia Grumio, her hair as purple as wolfsbane, her glasses as black as coffee. Her blue eyes complimented her light freckles very well. Her outfit of choice was a black and white spiked choker with a skull necklace. Her black and white hoodie made her look poor, to Achilles this made no sense. Her family was of the richest, she did not obey rules and got bailed out of torture and death. She never respected anyone, she walked out of her house everyday with bruises on her face and other visible places. What he didn’t understand was that she was training in fist fighting with her brother, Jax.

Her brother had black hair as did his father, blues eyes just ran in the family. He almost always wore a brown button up with a black sweater vest. He may seem like a book worm but he will kill a man if someone hurts his family. He had been practicing in boxing for most of his life. On there way to school Caedicia walked up to Achilles, something she had never done. She talked to him the whole way to school about her training and how good she had gotten. He knew she was getting to something that was bad.

“How good are you, let me fight you.” She said with an evil smirk on her face.

“I’m fine. I don’t want to get my a*s kicked by a female.”

He just looked at her beautiful face for a second then walked away.

“Ya know walking away while someone is talking to you is rude!” She screamed at him to return to her now,” You have to obey, because you’re a good boy.”

Achilles kept walking saying nothing, his quilt of disobeying destroyed him. He knew that it would but nothing would be more dishonorable than getting into a fight with a girl.