To Describe It In Words

An Attempt To Encapsulate That Feeling In Its Entirety

She’s that eternal sorceress
Who anoints me with the precious ointment extracted from her heart
Placing it on my head causing epiphanies
Revealing the true man in me
Now she raises me UP
A true resurrection
From the death of the old me
So how can I reply
To such a Butterfly
 
She’s that silent rain
That does not fall on your windowpane
But has its droplets drop on my crown
Those droplets cascade down my crown
Making me KING
Drenched I rise to my throne
The waves of her rain brought me here
So what can I say
To such a Mermaid
 
She’s that canvas
And I’m her Painter
So at midnight when we come together
We create a masterpiece
As I
Stroke
My paintbrush upon her
She’s my muse and my workstation
So what smile should I give
To this Mona Lisa

She’s that distant star
Who seduces me with her astronomy
As luminous lights form her hips
She attracts me with her constellation
As she has granted only me
With a telescope to view such beauty
Only I can wish upon a star
As a lone astronomer in this city
So what wish should I bestow
Upon a Virgo

Author's Note

Please Be As Honest And Frank As Possible. I Need To Hear FULL Criticism

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing words made the photo come alive. The description was very good. I had to read the poem a few times for the strong words and statements were outstanding.
"She’s that canvas
And I’m her Painter
So at midnight when we come together
We create a masterpiece"
Thank you for sharing this excellent poem.
Coyote

[AlieahRose]

I FEEL LIKE...
THIS IS SOMETHING...
I WOULD WRITE...
IT'S SO FAMILIAR...
TO ME AND...
I SMILED THE...
WHOLE TIME I...
WAS READING THIS...
THANKS FOR SHARING...

[Allison]

Hun, this was magic. You are a genius.

Beautiful descriptions, and incredibly well written. The first read was astounding, after the second read the imagery really took on its own form.
Thanks for sharing.

[Celeste21]

Virgo's are very powerful woman. My older sister is a virgo, and I admire her greatly. I like how the woman in your poem uplifts you to your greatest potential, while simutaneously illustrating her strength as well. I love the last few lines about her being astronomy and attracting you with constellations. Instilling you with a telescope. A very unique analogy. Her being equal to astronomy shows the pedestal of respect you have for her and how awe-struck by her you really are. Astronomy is also a very in-depth science, that took genius's and years of study to comprehend. How honored you must feel to have the attention of such a beautiful, celestial soul.

[Joiedevivre]

An ode to the muse. Great use of metaphors and imagery. I'm not in the habit of criticizing poetry as I believe each write is a piece of one's soul to be appreciated. I really enjoyed this.

[Lily Mae]

I think that this is a beautiful write, full of passion and appreciation..
"Only I can wish upon a star
As a lone astronomer in this city
So what wish should I bestow
Upon a Virgo" perfect..xx

[Ruth]

I think you have seduced all "she" could be love! Simply amazing poem! I am in awe :) Everything infused here and nothing taken for granted, well thought out, excellent! xx

[Katannaism]

This. is. simply. EXQUISITE. Beautiful metaphors and such raw energy and passion! I can really feel the emotion being juxtaposed here. This is simply wonderful. I salute you!! :)

[Praiser]

Fresh muscic to play , so many key points you made and some that make you think, but Super , My criticsm is be happy with the ones you do touch not the ones you cant

[PaperDoll]

Lovely poem. Very visual, and it has a true depth of emotion. It feels like love. :) Great stuff.