Death

To the well-organized mind, death is but the next great adventure...

I slowly die inside,

For all the times I’ve cried….

I’ve cried for you,

You look at me,

With your beautiful eyes.

You look right through me,

Like I was never alive….

I am visible,

I always will be to you…,

For some reason I knew,

I would always be,

Like this to you..

I wish you were missing me,

Like I was missing you..,

But no matter what I do,

I am always dead to you..

Our dead are never dead to us,

until we have forgotten them.
Dead is like a CO2,

which every one inhale every day...

but exhaling deadness  

 EVERY DAY

Author's Note

Hope u enjoy reading it.... :)

Reviews

[Chris]

Seemed like two poems for the price of one. If it isn't two then your thought pattern changed direction as well as intent - least that is what it appears to me.

If it IS two then the first reads well and understandably, but the second feel distracted and incomplete to me.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

thanks for the review :)
and I'm gonna fix it ..

[Valentine]

The first half of the write I liked much more than the CO2 part. Valentine

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

thanks for the review :)

[Cool Girl]

This was so powerful! I love the first line very much! It's just amazing:)

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review :)

[Cool Girl]

WeLcome:) :)

[Raja Anjana Kothapalli]

"You look at me,
A unique and interesting poem. I enjoyed it. Esply the lines "With your beautiful eyes. You look right through me, Like I was never alive!" Very well done Ov3R_sKiLl3D! Thanks for sharing!☺

[Lavender Soya]

Full of wisdom. Thank you for sharing your wonderful piece my friend. Your sentiments are very much appreciated. I like how the elements of this poem agree with each other. See you around! :-)

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review...
And see u around :)

[Lavender Soya]

My pleasure. :-)

[closed]

this is the most interesting and complex piece you've put out so far OS
you're a really good poet

can't wait to see what you do next

-Dream

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review Dream I am glad u liked it :)