THE DAY I BORN

its about me and what happened to me.....

    THE DAY I BORN

 

 

It started the day I was born

You were the one that I loved,

And

You were the one I need,

It wasn't so hard,

It wasn't so easy,

You were the one that I loved,

And

You were the one, who cares about me,

It started the day I was born,

It wasn't so easy to live without you,

It wasn't so easy to sleep without you,

Without you my life was nothing,

Without you I had no life,

It started the day I was born;

My heart was beating for you

And

My soul was waiting for you,

It started the day I was born……. <3

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

hope you guys are gonna like this............... :)

Reviews

[Mary Bradley]

Heartfelt poem ! ... your yearning of a mother figure is quite strong .
Good work and thank you for sharing .

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review :)

[Valentine]

Was this the wanting of a mother or the future wanting of a sweetheart? Valentine

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review :)

[yvo miki]

try put the day I was born sound wired with day I born but other then that it was good

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review I like weird poems XD

[yvo miki]

lol I see that

[Nila M.]

Very nice sentiment in this one. You can feel the appreciation come through. I guess we all have unique relationships with the people who love us, sometimes good, sometimes not so good. I'm glad that your memories are fond and caring. Thank you for sharing your poem

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

I am glad u liked it :)

[The StoryTeller]

I remember this one... :)) Good memories. I think that yes, we all have our mothers, and they were here before us, and yet they were waiting on us, and us on them, whether they are our birth mothers or not. And that bond is unbreakable, the thing that chains us together, and one of the few things that are truly beautiful in this world. :) Keep it up man. My only problems would be the grammar, what with the "Day I born" I'd think it should be "The day I was born." Anyways, great job.

"Live As If You're Gonna Die"
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[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

I was thinking of changing it to "the day I was born" I think its late to change now....
But anyways thanks for the review :)

[The StoryTeller]

No, it's not, you go to manage writing, then you find this poem name, then you click the little pencil which is edit, then you change the stuff you want to change with the poem (title, wording, the poem itself, etc, etc) then you save and voila!

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

hahaha i know that stuff bro XD

[The StoryTeller]

So why did you say it was too late to change now? XD

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

because every one has read it duhhh... XD

[The StoryTeller]

Well, even if they've read it you can change it. XD I change stuff according to people's suggestions even after they've read it.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

I already did XD

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, okay.

[stars are far]

This is a very emotional poem, God bless your mother and all mothers over the world.
That was very well done , keep writing :)

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review :)

[CA Anurag Sharma]

I wrote something about My Mom too.... and i liked this emotional piece
"You were the one, who cares about me,
It started with the day I born,
It wasn't so easy to live without you,
It wasn't so easy to sleep without you,
Without you my life was nothing,
Without you I had no life"
A very well written poem... good one

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Wow I like your writtng.....
Thanks for the review thou :)

[Deepika]

Seems like you've dedicated it to your Mom. Good one!:)

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review I am glad u liked it :)

[Daisy]

it's a wonderful poem..... such words of gratitude toward a mother i think.... keep up the good work...

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for the review :)

[jonah]

good effort on this one, Salman. I see from this poem and another poem I commented yesterday your writing style seems to be straightforward, but there's still a chance that I might be wrong. well, there's nothing wrong about straightforward poetry. it has honesty as its power. but maybe I can give a little tips. you can try searching for new words and making experiments in your poems. but, still, don't let words betray your very emotion :)
Anyway, this poem seems so personal. I don't know what happened to you, but I hope you're always in high spirit to live your life :)

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Tanks for the review :)