When I started out to find the reason to live,

I am writing this for weeks i hope it gonna touch your hearts and you are gonna like this......................

When I started out to look for love in the world,
I found out that I had begun with the wrong address with me.

The one with whose arrival life had become complete,
and joys had knocked at my door,
every lack was fulfilled,
why did she gave me such a punishment,
why did she give me dreams and then took them away,
if I live, it feels like a torture,
such pains she gave me.

When I started out to find god in her heart,
I found out that I had begun with the wrong address with me.

The one whom the heart looked for a hundred times in every moment,
Without her, the morning is angry, evenings are angry, the day is angry

She should come and take
her memories that are here..
I don't have the way, or the address,
where shall I find her now..

When I started out to find the reason to live,
I found out that I had begun with the wrong address with me

Author's Note

HOP3 YOU GUYS ARE GONNA LIKE THIS................ =)
Looking forward for your F33DBACKs

Reviews

[luvs2write]

I like this one. =) I like the imagery you used with the whole setting out with the wrong address theme. I just wonder...should you use question marks when you ask a question in a poem? I'm pretty bad at poetry, so it might just be me. Anyway, nice work and if you do make an edited version I'll look forward to reading it. Keep writing!!

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

thanks for your review and i will look forward to make a new version of it.............. =)

[Lizardo]

I love this, this truely beautiful
You've left me speachless on this one
A beautiful poem!

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for uour review and your gentle words =)

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!

[Lavender Soya]

Promising and inspiring, though it needs a little more proofreading, especially on some grammar points. Still, it's a good read! Thank you for sharing this honest and heartfelt poem. :-)

[The StoryTeller]

I think this was really good. I think it could use some work to get better, but I'll talk with you about that on Monday at school. I think it really reaches out, and shows the struggle. You found the wrong girl. You looked for similar beliefs (God) but they weren't there. You looked for similar feelings, but they weren't there. Yet, even through that she left an imprint, a mark, upon your heart, and you miss her, etc. You are angry and want her, even though you don't. You wish she would take it back, but you don't know where she is. You started with the wrong person. That's the summary of what I got from this. I think it was good. I also think that everyone pretty much starts off with the wrong person. It takes awhile (usually) to find the right one. So if this was written about you, keep searching. :) Good job.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for your review and we are gonna talk about this in school so i can make it much more better, but i am glad you liked it =)

[The StoryTeller]

Okay, sounds good, I look forward to editing with you. Oh, I never asked you this, but can you rap? I'm thinking about trying to feature someone in one of my songs. They can be off of this site too, but yeah, I was just wondering if you do.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

nop i can't do wrap but i will try thou

[The StoryTeller]

Okay, I'll hear you on Monday. Even if you can't do rap, we could still collaborate on a poem together.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

ok looking forward to do a poem together

[The StoryTeller]

Lol, I'm not that good, but okay. :)

[Lenah Mehzabin]

I liked it . It's simple but full of honest and painful emotions ! very nice poem : )

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

Thanks for your review =)

[Kinza Sheikh]

The conceptualization of address is really beautiful. The poem is strong, only try editing the second half a bit.
I am no poet, but feel that it has more potential to grow stronger.

[Ov3R_sKiLl3D]

I am gonna read it again and try to fix it but thanks for your review :)

[Kinza Sheikh]

My pleasure too :)