Untitled (You Lied)

After the talks
After the fights
After the crying
And all throughout the laughter
You lied

 

Sweetly
Unassumingly
Blatantly.
And I listened too trustingly while
You lied

 

I've become unshackled from denial
For denial is no longer entangled with trust
Trust had a tryst with truth
And deteriorated when introduced to reality
Since reality declares
You lied

 

Again...

 

and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and againand again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again and again

 

Your affliction for
My antagonism toward being raped
Over! and over! and over!
By you
Is not only duplicitous
But also contemptible

 

My amazement at
Your affected chastity and sincerity
Is boundless.
I am grief-stricken
Defeated
Outraged

 

You lied.

Reviews

[brainelation]

i lied.
again and again and again, may as well be a million times.
i didn't get it.
this poem made me get it.
the lines "sweetly, unassumingly, blatantly"
drive home the duplicitousness,
the way that all of those "i love you's"
turn into poisonous memories when it's learned that when i said it, i was with someone else.
i've learned, and i've grown since then. i've even been lied to.
none of that makes this poem feel less like a letter meant for me from my past.

[Orlando Murcia]

I hate liars
and I hate people who hurt
others

I hate bad people period
this was a great piece
It showed a lot of rage towrds
this person

Great write

Orlando M

[karsplace]

Since I was asked to review this , and you are my friend so I will try to give a good review. Your manipulation of words is very good, and its short enough for me to not lose interest. Since he/she found out that he lied, what's next. Follow-up poem?

[Michael J. Gyulai]

Strangely, it was the punctuation that stood out for me in this piece. Most lines end openly, but some end with a period, and others with the emotional outburst of an exclamation point. I felt this really added passionate depth to the work, and created an emotional roller coaster ride for the reader.

[J.P.O.et]

This is awesome
I checked some of the other reviews and it seems most concur
'Trust had a tryst with truth'
This just touched me, I will never forget that line
no, really, it is phenom
Do you think the agains were a lil too much
Wait, I just checked Ms Robert review and I can see the point
it is meant to stress the point of being misled and violated incessantly
likedlots
J.P.O.et

[Erin]

This is INSANE.

"Trust had a tryst with truth"
Its like everything i have ever thought was out down on paper.
all the outrage and burning tears.
you're an amazing writer and i look forward to more of your stuff--
It just strikes a chord with me.
:)

[SweetPeachesAlways]

whoa! Good one! You lied!

Is not only duplicitous
But also contemptible

I like those two lines very much! Good write...good flow...good use of imagery...

[luthien7]

"I've become unshackled from denial
For denial is no longer entangled with trust
Trust had a tryst with truth
And deteriorated when introduced to reality
Since reality declares
You lied"

These are great lines - the whole poem is really well done, you can feel the emotion though it is delivered in a very straighfoward way. Like a simple acceptance after so long wanting to believe the "blatant" lies. Very, very nice.

[laceyjane23]

This piece really moved me! there is so much emotion in it. Trust has a tryst with truth is my favorite line i would have to say. you did a great job on this!!!
keep it up!
laceyjane

[Qwashi]

sadness is so sweet, it makes one feel alive what would i do without it, thank you, you words have whisped me to newer levels of emotion with solid tastes of sulphur bitters & sinkle-bible, i feeeel Alive!!!!!!!!