This Night

These are the stars

Under which we promised eternity,

A similar night shaded dark and blue

As you held me and I held you.

My heart would melt 

At the sound of your voice

And my hand would tremble 

At the soft touch of your skin.

As I looked into your eyes

Deeper than the sea

I would drown,I would drown 

Ever so happily.

The fireflies illuminate the darkness

Like your body at night,

The night wind howls

As if whispering your name.

Now you are gone

Like the stars at dawn

In the arms of another,

In the arms of another.

Your curls now hide another face

The fingers that touch you are not mine

And your lips which had once touched mine

Now kiss another.

The night is dark

And at the stars I am staring

Knowing and feeling your memories

Of a night like this.

 Like the night has forgotten day

I will forget you

Along with all your memories

I will bury my suffering too

As I write the beginning and the end

This maybe our finale.

And next time on a night like this

You will only be a verse in this poetry.

Reviews

[Diamond]

Wow, this is a nice pain filled poem. And how the heart that promised eternity had broken into pieces to the end to say

"I will forget you
Along with all your memories
I will bury my suffering too"

can only portray the amount of betrayal. Nice poem.

[Nwang]

Thank you for your review ^_^

[Ardra]

Very deep .... liked the way you have expressed the pain of loosing her to someone else..... thanks for sharing this beautiful creation :)

[Nwang]

Thanks for your review @Ria

[Bala Gorthi]

Your poem echoed the ache all through....
The line says it all " you will only be a verse in this poetry".
I loved reading this poem, especially the whole last stanza.
A very good write.
Thanks for sharing. Keep sharing.:-):-):-)

[Nwang]

Thanks for your lovely review..

[Jade]

really enjoyed this piece of writing loved the last verse

[Nwang]

Thank you for the review !!!

[Ruth]

Wrenches the heart...such bonds always leave a mark and how quickly the world shifts in appearance when the situation changes, sigh...lovely piece :)

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review :D

[Ayushi Beura]

Nwang well done...ur poem is really good

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review!!!

[Nicole M.]

Lovely and tragic..nicely written.

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review!

[Nisreen]

Break ups are so over rated

What is in the heart is in the heart ...... you watch people so stubbornly force their head onto another's shoulder or kiss someone new

but that love
the real one

well no new person can change that

no moving on changes that

a very sad write

[Nwang]

love is short,forgetting is long and how can you unlove something which you loved once. Thanks for reviewing.

[Nisreen]

Love is long .... It's endless .... ThAt stuff is a lifetime story .... Humans that can't absorb it try to forget it .... It's an illusion the idea of forgetting .... C'est impossible c'est carrement impossible

[barleygirl]

I like your poem very much. Many people write of light & dark, night & day, so sometimes it can start to all sound the same to me. But in your case, your expressions sound original & I think it's becuz of some creative & interesting details such as: "your curls now hide another face." I always prefer when a sad poem ends with a sign of hope or resurgence of confidence . . . such as in your final stanza.

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review!!

[Akshita]

It is such a beautiful, painful romantic poem! Loved it! : )

[Nwang]

thanks for the review