Queen

Underneath the open sky

I rule these naked lands

A nation created by my forefathers

A kingdom forged by its people

Men have spilled their blood here

Lives have been lost over it.

Some tried to conquer it,

Some tried to destroy it.

Yet it still stands today

Unbroken,unbound,unconquered

In this land of Kings and Gods

Men have followed men

Yet I a girl in armor

Leading my army ahead

My hair is cut short

My skin no longer pale white

My hands are bruised by the sword

My heart hardened by the wars

I am no longer ignorant

I do not require a king

The battlefield is my dance floor

And my sword is the one who sings

I am the Queen 

And this is my kingdom

My name is Snow White

And I command my legion.

                          

                            

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your poem is well-stated & imaginative . . . many places the descriptions POP! ("my hands are bruised by the sword") . . . I can feel the defiance growing thru-out the poem, until the finale declares the identity of this narrator. I enjoy the creativity of people who write the antithesis of some long-accepted fairytale.

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review!!

[Ruth]

I too was surprised by the finale :) I had Joan in mind also, so this was a cool surprise Nwang, beautifully written :)

[topsyturvy]

I did not expect Snow White, reminded me of Joan of arc :p good write nonetheless :)

[Nwang]

Thanks. I have always been intrigued by fairy tales but I am never satisfied because the heroine is too weak or too innocent I want some reality in them so according to me, after the death of her step mother Snow White became a battle hardened Queen and her experiences taught her to be a warrior not just a beautiful princess.

[Nicole M.]

First 2 lines drew me right in. Good one.

[Nwang]

Thank you!!!

[Diamond]

Empowering. I would say this is something the world needs. Simply amazing. And every word is loaded with courage and passion. Thank you for sharing this writing.

[Nwang]

Thank you!!!for such encouragement.

[Rvie]

I like it! I like how you play with words. Thumps Up! ^_^

[Nwang]

Thanks for the review :D