Creeping up on You

It creeps up on you when you least expect it

Struggling through rough days

Looking both ways, I realized

I was already happy

Author's Note

A senryu... sorry, but this one came to me in English, so no Japanese version for now...

Reviews

[Jennie Baron]

I'm never sure now to review a senryu or haiku although I find their elegant simplicity breathtaking at times. Suffice it to say this is truly beautiful and artful at distilling the essence of the emotion. I had to chime in and say so although I can't provide learned critique on it.

[Nusquam Esse]

Thanks for reading, and I am glad that you enjoyed this that much. Haiku/Senryu are simple enough of a form; but getting that concise cutting twist at the end can be a bit tricky. Japanese poetry really helps a person like me, who is much too verbose and eloquent, to learn how to use short cutting words.

[duff]

I really like this. I enjoy the form but more so what can be said in such few words. Delivering the message with very little. I lived in Japan for quite awhile and hold it dear in my heart. Great work. Skillful.

[Clara]

Nusquam, I love this.

We should all learn to be happy and content where we are. Our 'struggles through rough days' mean that things are already getting better.

Thank you for sharing.

[Alisa Js]

Very well stated, and a sentiment I can certainly agree with. I've enjoyed reading through your body of work and will return.

Until then, may your days be filled with wonder.

Alisa💫

[g d chalupsky]

I read this as the thoughts of someone dealing with the fallout of a bad choice.

A person that has cheated on their spouse or made a poorly considered decision to have plastic surgery, etc.

To me, the strength of this piece is that it is a truth independent of any specific setting. I think most of us could find a point in our own lives, that would be well defined by this verse.

Congrats.

[Erin Leigh]

This made me smile, very nice.

[Matching Socks]

Love it. It's wonderful. I don't mind there's no Japanese, I don't speak Japanese. :P

[Nusquam Esse]

touche, I don't think many people on here do... Still, I am used to writing Japanese poetry in Japanese. :) Thanks for reading, I have been reading your stuff by the way; just not been doing many reviews lately. Let me know if there is something that you do want my input on though.

[Matching Socks]

It's ok, I'm on vacation so just popping in and out! :-)
My time here is scarce and scattered. But... You are welcome, I always love and appreciate your words. No pressure though. I just popped in cuz I missed ya...

[Nusquam Esse]

Vacation, how lucky! I have had work for the last six days, no days off... so I am in the exact opposite state, lol. I am glad that you can appreciate my writing; I have been trying to branch out into different styles and directions, since I want to be versatile. I will definitely make sure to review you once I get a let up... An "cuz I missed ya", tis a sweet sentiment, thank you much!

[Matching Socks]

Oh. Yuck. I'll be back to work next week though. Ugh....

[Nusquam Esse]

better enjoy every moment then!

[Einstein Noodle]

this is different! rough days .. look both ways .. snuck up on by happy ... :) i like it! i dont know if you know who Ann Landers was but she wrote advice columns (passed away in '02 .. i read something from her a long time ago that has stuck with me all these years .. she said when things are tough and we think we cant take any more .. remind ourselves that in three days we will not remember why we think that .. barring some illness .. i find that it is absolutely true .. your senryu reminds me of that advice.

E.

[Nusquam Esse]

Thanks for the awesome input; I was not aware of who Ann Landers was. (I am bad with names) Anyway, it just came to me out of nowhere; and really reminds me of my past. Things would be hell, and without me really realizing it, I would get used to it, and it would just be business as usual. Before I realized it, I would be strangely content with how my life had turned out; and it is like this every time. We just gotta bear with the hardness in life; and hope for a better tomorrow. And in the end, happiness will find us when we least expect it.

[Delmar Cooper]

I'm a little rusty on Japanese so don't put yourself out on my account. I like the idea, much like the journey _is_ the destination. The struggle is the reward.

[Frieda P]

Genius, you're pretty clever for a red dragon....

[Nusquam Esse]

Am I now? But only for a Red Dragon... :P

[Frieda P]

I haven't seen you without your superhero underroos... ;)

[Nusquam Esse]

well... court order... not much I can do about it.

[Frieda P]

Ha gotcha, hate when that happens...