Never Let Go

Eclipsed by a diadem of stars
   Crumbling 'neath obliviating suns
       Parodied by penumbrous moons;
Left only to strive under the Void
       Shackled to a voracious demise

Roaring omnipresent truth,
   Withholding the key to see
        Through cornerstones of dismay,
Exiled by cruel, bereft
        Time.


Twas but a piece of the finite
   When I first gazed within
       Eyes endowed with fathomed tides.
I'll never feel love,
       But even this beast wept

As you lay in my arms,
   Cold as the night's shadow
       Which bore you to me,
I understood the infinite
       Sorrow


With trembling hands
   I sought ardor
       Cold skin will never hold.
I waited, isolated--a suicide
       Crushed under despair

Borne away on untraveled rivers,
   I'll search in solitude
For a way to bridge infinities
   Which will always be

       One...

I'll never let go.          

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

I have read this now so many times I think it is starting to change from a poem to a mantra. And what i relate to the most is the desire to avoid the gesture of caving in. Becuase at the start is already been put under pressure by the power of the mighty celestial objects something preventing from forming, relating sent into excile even. It is ardous. But then a revelation of sorts, destiny driven brought if anything a little hope although fear it evokes. What lives here will not cave - in. Remain "die-hard"

I really welcome this.

And I thankyou

[Ghost of Jupiter]

I told you I would have to break my silence for this piece, lol...and after reading it again I am just as enamored with this poem! You definitely are too hard on yourself for this is amazing. I want to quote my favorite lines but I am finding it difficult to decide which one really sparkled the most for they are all just beautiful.

I will have to say though that third stanza...wow ... "Eyes endowed with fathomed tides" you managed to pull together two of my affinities, eyes and the ocean, in one gorgeous line and then laced it with such emotion with the following "I will never feel love, but even this beast wept". You sent my heart plummeting in that swift induction of emotion into your piece. For I was floating on the images you created in the beginning, diadem of stars, obliviating suns, prenumbrous moons, catching the hint of emptiness you crafted...then completely pulled into the sorrow of this poem. Absolutely astounding, and you say you are not a poet, ppftt. Whether in your stories or your poetry you are still the master word weaver, my friend! Beautiful ...simply beautiful!

[Alfred Kukitz]

Not so Nusquam! I marveled at your beauty in ideas and words. You appear as a scholar in high form.

[Chadvonswan]

I just have to say this was damn good.

[Pryde Foltz]

Borne away on untraveled rivers,
I'll search in solitude
For a way to bridge infinities
Which will always be
One…

We lose our way in romance on the way to the one. Wonderful penning.

[elvenom]

This is marvelously magical. To be honest, I rarely adore so much someone else' work and I'm so glad I found something that would completely win me. Really glad I added you, mate.

[Nusquam Esse]

Glad you enjoyed this so much; and I completely understand your perspective. When I first joined, it was hard to find other people's work that interested me. Over time I found some solid writers; but even more so, my general perspective and attitude towards the site changed. I'm now on here as much to review as to be reviewed.

[AprilRN1210]

Not half bad? This is AMAZING. I was captivated by each stunning word carefully placed to create this heart-wrenching write. Wow.

[Nusquam Esse]

Thanks for taking time to read over this one; I am glad you enjoyed it. I suppose I have a poet stashed away somewhere (he is bound, trying to signal for help)

[AprilRN1210]

I would say he doesn't need help at all.. It was my pleasure, I honestly enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like "voracious demise"---
to never feel love, and to know that gap will never be bridged, but to search nonetheless...

under a diadem of stars....a little emily dickinson there..."diadem" one of her favorite words.
you do quite well with free verse...slipping some nice alliteration in there also...

[Nusquam Esse]

Great catch on both the alteration, and on the inherent contradiction between never loving, and obsession.

[Frieda P]

Half bad, are you serious? Articulately perfect...and the sentiment shines through like thunderbolts. Par excellence! Really enjoyed this read...

[Nusquam Esse]

Thanks for the kind words; I am glad you enjoyed it. I suppose I shouldn't be so hard on myself. :) I am just a novice with poetry in general, since I rarely write it; and while form makes sense to me, free-verse is a bit trickier to understand since it is more about the feeling that words carry.

[Frieda P]

Aren't all creative souls? I'm the opposite, I write how I feel, find it difficult to write under any parameters, I can't rhyme to save my life ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

i like it a lot ... touches dark feelings no one really likes to feel ... especially appreciate these lines:
"Roaring omnipresent truth,
Withholding the key to see"

and the weaving of the Spiritual into human endeavor .. glad you shared this Esse!
E.