紅涙など (To Those Bitter Tears:)

紅涙など (To Those Bitter Tears:)

A Chapter by Nusquam Esse
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Another Senryu (Translation provided)

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Kourui,

Naze Konna
Chikaku ni Uso wo
Tsukutta no?




To those Bitter Tears:
Why did the likes of you make
these lies run so deep?




© 2018 Nusquam Esse


Author's Note

Nusquam Esse
Here is another senryu for those who enjoy my attempts at Japanese poetry. This translation suffers from some extreme liberties to make it conform to English Senryu standards. In order to meet the syllable counts I actually had to integrate the title itself as part of the poem. (Because Japanese is less wordy than English, it would actually be expressed with fewer words than allowed in a haiku)

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Aloha,

This one is quite good. 'Bitter tears', nice!

Interesting ending.

I will return.

Alisa ;-)


Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a beautiful senryu. Think I should learn Japanese from you. :D Senryu is my favourite form.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nusquam Esse

9 Years Ago

Thanks for reading, I am glad you enjoyed it. Hahaha, Japanese is not exactly an easy language... ;.. read more
you are quite good at these translations..amazing that you can do the japanese part...

and yes, the lies run deep, very deep.

Posted 10 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Years Ago

that is true, trying and much practice trying. :))
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

It may be of interest, but 'Kourui' refers to crimson tears, which are filled with blood of sufferin.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

10 Years Ago

it works here.
So much said in so few words...enjoyed :) x

Posted 10 Years Ago


powerful expression ... well done says i ..personifying the tears is perfect .. absolutely perfect ... wish i had thought of it when suffering them ..might have made it easier :)
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


For your translated version: It's simple but strong. I like it. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on March 21, 2014
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Tags: Japanese, Senryu, Haiku, Lies, Bitter, Tears


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