Scribbles

Just my life, things I needed to get out. Comments would be helpful...

I've been fragile

For a long time

So if we ever fall in love

You better not break my heart

I won't be able to carry on

If it shatters anymore

I barely have enough strength

Within myself

For my heart to power my body

 

Cut

Pop

Slice

Clip

Zip

Drink

Swallow

Flinch

Cry

Don't 

Scream.

 

Voices yell

Figures appear

They say things

I don't wanna hear

I don't have a choice

I can't block them out

They live in my head

My brain makes the shadows

People with claws

Dark, ominous figures

Hands reach out at me

Beady eyes that change color

Depending on what they feel 

For me that day

Blue for apathetic

Red for angry

Blackish for murderous

Yellow for sorrow

Purple for when they're about to...

 

My life sucks

You can agree with me

Please 

I want for you to agree

What I do not want

Is for you to relate to me

I don't want anyone to relate

I don't want anyone

To go through what I do

I don't want them to 

Hear and see what I do

I would never wish my life

Upon another person

It is too horrid and they would shatter

Just like I have

They'd be a body without a soul

And live would become darkness

But for me

That darkness is familiar

It's what I call home

These walls close in

People stare

No one cares

Voices murmer

Voices whisper

Everyone watches me

And people call me lonely

HA! 

I like them to see all the attention

I'm receiving...

Although it's unneeded. 

They say they'll leave

Once I get fatter

Sure, the real people will

But the ones in my head?

They'll be with me until 

The day I die

With me until I stop

Popping pills

Cutting my wrists

Making myself puke

Over excising to lose weight

Starving myself

Finding other girls like me

Who have tips to get skinnier

 

Drop vinegar on your tongue if you think you may eat

Don't eat after seven at night

Drink one cold glass of water every hour

Brush your teeth before you eat -

The taste when matched with food will disgust you

Pinch your fat when you feel like eating

Count to 100 when you get a craving and it might pass

Make a list of why not to eat when you want to

Then read it twenty times

Drink with every or every other bite until full -

Makes you look active at the table

Tap your finger or shake your leg when sitting down

Every. Calorie.Counts.

Sit up straight.

It burns 10% more calories than slouching

Get your sleep.

Less than 6 hours stimulates your appetite

Eat what you crave in moderation if you must

Only a few bites, savor it.

I'm messed up

Helping other girls like me

But when no one is there to help us

We must help each other

Or fade away

Although...

Fading away seems like a good idea right now.

Reviews

[Michael X]

The opening isn't enough to grab the reader's attention because it's such a common termanology. and there for isn't enough to keep the reader,
i scanned over the form and it seems like an abstract idea, but just looks
too difficult to read. try to go simple if you want readers to identify,
try to be original if you want to stand out. otherwise writings that don't
usually get passed on by, you haver talent, keep practicing and have fun :)

[Persephone]

Nicely written.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was nicely written. I know how you feel though. I go through a lot of this myself. People really shouldn't have to deal with this. I know how it is because I feel like I need to do something to make myself better. I used to slit my wrists. I stopped for promises. For my parents and family. I do stress over my weight at times. Which is very normal for a girl. I know how life is. I hate how it is. Good job. I thought it was good. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Dupree]

Okay my review for this isn't kind but it's honest. I don't like this. The form isn't that great. Your opening doesn't grab the readers sttention. It rather annoys me.

[Dior]

Its a great poem

[Numb]

One thing I ask for is for no one to say that they can relate. I would hate for someone to say that, because I do not want anyone going through what I am.
It would be horrible.

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