Belly of the Beast

12 word horror story contest! What do you think?

Her feet disappeared into its gullet.
It looked at me.
"Still hungry."

Author's Note

I'm trying my hand both at horror and my first contest! My good writing friend Lavorther is also joining this contest, so please check out his page, too! If you're willing of course!

Reviews

[Lavorther]

Amazing how many people can do with just 12 words. I got a full picture in my mind, which is hard to do with three sentences. Also, thank you for mentioning me ^.^

I barely dare correct your spelling because you are much better at that than i am, but i have a feeling "it`s" needs to be "its". I might be wrong though.

[Briana]

Oh my lord my phone autocorrected my word! Thank you for pointing that out but unfortunately I've already submitted like an idiot. Oh well, if I don't make rank for that it's simply not to be. Thank you for the kind words!

[Novel Minded_75]

The unknown, terrifies us.
Things that we cannot exert control over, terrifies us.
Faced with death, and knowing your next, that is truly terrifying!
Excellent work, Briana.
Good luck on the contest!

[jimmy45]

Great description, very good

[Briana]

Thank you!

[Nila M.]

Very nice, I love the concept of 12 word horror. Keep it up!!

[Briana]

Thank you very much!

[Robert Parlange]

Good job. Horror haiku?

Think I'll grab a burger.

Keep writing.

[Briana]

Thank you! Hope that burger was good!!

[Relic]

An ominous picture from only 12 words. Trying to condense words like this has never been easy for me. You did a fine job here. Good luck with the contest. :)

[Briana]

Thank you so much! I'm hoping just to place! Everyone else's are so good as well!

[William Richards]

Wow that's awesome. Great use of 12 words! I wonder if you change that first 'she' to 'My' what do you think?

[Briana]

I'm extremely grateful for your review! I'm not sure making that change makes sense when looking at the next two sentences, though. Unless you meant to change those as well?

[William Richards]

Yeah maybe not! Good work with this, hope you do well in the competition :-)

[Saddam]

Its little yet capable to scare me....
You are succeed in it.

[Briana]

Thank you very much!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A scary picture! And only in 3 lines!
Enjoyed this brevity!

[Briana]

Thank you so much!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[Francis Orion]

Just 12 words and one word describes it: Chilling! Brevity at its finest. Well done.

[Briana]

Thank you so very much!

[Leon C]

A lovely haunting image. Well done.

I read it several times and sometimes the final line was chilling and some times there ws a hint of humour. I like that. It allows the reader to interpret your work

[Briana]

I'm so pleased to know it can be read in a number of ways! Thank you for your kind review. I think I may make a couple more of these. This was a fun idea.