Tears like Rain

I called for you today, did you hear me?

I reached for you today, did you feel me?

Guidance is what I asked for

consuming comfort is what I need.

Open and gaping, pain that rapes

a heart that so often just bleeds.

On my knees I fall and ask for your hand

I don't know how to rise

I'm not sure I can stand.

I need a laying on of hands

I need your gentle soul;

I need you to come to me now

I long to feel whole.

Words that trip and stumble

over one another so clumsy

Not sure I care how it flows

I just need you to read me.

I called to you today, through my tears

I begged...

The heavens opened up tonight

and rain began to fall...is it you

crying with me, releasing the loss?

The times that were stolen, the moments we didnt get

the fatherly way you would have scolded

and all the ways you would have molded

me into a girl her father loves

one that a man would behold

and shower with respect.

I am an image of you, a being in which you dwell;

I feel like a child, needy and weak

and quietly I listen, waiting for you to speak

to me of life and of love and the powers that be

point me in the right direction,

please find me, because you I seek.

I stepped outside into the night

and felt the rain on my face...

in the darkness i reached

and sadness was replaced

with the soothing of the rain

as it washed over my tear stained cheeks;

Quietly I submit and know that you are there

in my tears and the rain

just everywhere.

 

Reviews

[Sleeping Maiden]

Such wonderful work! I really love this poem. So emotional.. and I love the way you describe the longing..
I can relate to this so well. Deep poem.. I've felt this way just recently actually. Seeking for that guidance is something we all ask at times.. its just hard to wait to get the answer. Beautiful poem though!!

[Amila Jay]

A beautiful write:-)

[dreaming dame]

Wow, So beautiful. I love this, it so fits. One of my best friends dad died and was buried today. :'( He left behind 4 married children, and two girls, one of which is engaged, the other only 16. And of course his wife.
But anyway, I felt the emotion in here, and it's wonderful to read what you know someone close to you is feeling.

[Inyourshadow]

I'll do my crying in the rain lilts softly in the background as the Everly Brothers sing as I read this deeply moving poem, you capture the need and the release from pain in baptism of natures tears, beautifully done my friend, keep em' coming

Be my solace in darkest days
let flow thy tears into mine eyes
as I picture your loving smile
my rainbow in stormy skies
you are my comfort and my hope
my need my want my all
so let your love wash over me
when ever raindrops fall

[...]

I stepped outside into the night
and felt the rain on my face...
in the darkness i reached
and sadness was replaced

oh these words echoed in my soul,
you are a powerful writer.
I like what I have read so far.
Keep up the amazing writing.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

this one touched me deeply. Reminded me of conversations I used to have with my husband shortly after his passing 3 years ago. Beautiful.......

[knightcall]

This is definitely packed with emotion. I wonder if the line break between pain that rapes & a heart might need tweaking. It just seems a little bit awkward. Nice imagery

[Rene Velez]

Raw emotional write...

[Richielee]

just fantastic,i felt this poem as i read it,your heart shine throughout : )

[Lily Mae]

This is freaky, I'm up hours before I need to be because I just had a dream just like this with just a couple of differences.. oh... twilight zone:)
I can feel the mesh between the two energy's and the lack of being whole so strongly...we fight sometimes with who we are and what we want..the end result is...
"Quietly I submit and know that you are there
in my tears and the rain
just everywhere." perfectly expressed :) xx