Winding Rivers

Like the flow of water you washed over me

Winding Rivers

 

Trickling slowly downstream the water flows

Like the smoothness of your words

To my ears

Whispered promises of love and laughter

Soft as the touch of your hand

On my skin

Currents that rage and passions that roar

Like the heat of your love

In my soul

You spun your web around me in cotton soft threads

Consuming, like the look in your eyes

That moved me

I saw tomorrow when you spoke to me

Bright as the rays of the sun in the sky

That warmed me

Over rocks the water splashes and slams

Like the impact of your callous ways

On my tender heart

Flow on downstream away from this place

Erase my mind of your face and my skin

Of your touch

Wipe away the soft kisses and the after taste so sweet

Erase away the memories of that early morning touch

And kill within me the need…

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Erase my mind of your face and my skin

Of your touch

Wipe away the soft kisses and the after taste so sweet

Erase away the memories of that early morning touch

And kill within me the need…

I love the last four lines...your chosen words throughout the poem are beautiful and heart felt. You have captured your emotions and feelings beautifully ...excellent poem. I totally agree with everything Coyote Poetry said!!

Kiddo, you write beautifully, I am always excited and anxious to visit your page and read read read read!!

[Amila Jay]

The last three lines are really touching, excellent write:)

[MAC]

great blending of life and a river. a river so inviting yet dangerous. the beauty we see doesn't always match the reality of diving in. again, okay you might get a little sick of this but it is honest, an excellent write. you have a soft touch for words even when sadness is the matter at hand.

[knightcall]

As a romantic, I appreciate smoothness in words. Doubly, being a poet I appreciate the technique you use to build up to the uh ER climax of this poem. This poem is distinct from your others.

[LetMeLaughLetMeSing]

Wow... this is a beautiful write... thank you for this. I love it!

[WindSong]

A very beautiful love sonnet I enjoyed reading!

WindSong

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That was a different way to describe the river, I thought it would be about a spiritual cleansing so kudos of the twist. Nicely done.

[dreaming dame]

:) Beautifully beyond, but so sad. :(

[lostboy]

the want or perhaps need ..to no longer want. i like this.

[DONALD EISSLER]

ah my dear your words flow like rapids in a stream wondermus i must say ... Thers a lot of gold that in stream of yours...
TK

[Aristede Craig Jr]

another one omgoshnesss a whirlwind tornado i love your writing it makes me feel at home lol :)