Senses

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SENSES

*inspired by 5 senses* by 50cent

 

Exploring skin, tasting flesh

Barely touching just lingering

Above my senses

All my senses

Intoxication from love

in a fog of ecstasy

swimming in desire

above my senses

all my senses

Lips traveling slowly

Up and down the spine

Intoxicating heat

Need desire yearning

Above my senses

All my senses

Passions dance acted out

Heart to heart

Souls dancing in time

To the erotic beat of desire

In unison, perfect harmony

Yours and mine

Above my senses

All my senses

Breathe me in

Let it control your senses

Feel me want me

Float

Above my senses

All my senses

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Kiddo, your writing is suburb. I love reading all you have. You are my inspiration ...it shows how much you put into your writing..everything as you do in life...Brilliant just brilliant. I can feel the swaying, the desires, and drink up all the rest in between over and above. The senses are there for something and look out girl because you used em all...in the most captivating and sensual way ..love it!!

[dead man talking]

right nice poem November Gold,very senshool

[knightcall]

I can see how this would be inspired by fifty scent, it has a wonderful rhythm to it, I love the short lines. BTW this is overdue but you haves wonderful smile. Must run in the family

[Enigma]

Wow. Brilliant. Brimming with sensuality and passion. Simple, succint and the repetetive lines add to the overall effect. Well penned. :D

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This is amazing, I really enjoyed this write.

[Chris]

Good flavor and flow.

Chris

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Pure, driven and altogether a paced rendition and anticipation and courage for a writer to the reader, well done, good read.

[Dalrymple]

Tasting flesh make you sould like a zombie, but other than that really good.

[Moflo]

Very nicely described and I like your repetition a lot. The pacing is perfect for a poem like this. Great write.

[Niki Wilson]

Wooaah... I felt freaked out.. Then you made me feel relieved.. Then warm... You twisted me round on a roller-coaster of feelings! Im glad I read this!