This is brilliant. Your writing is fantastic, the descriptions paint a perfect picture and the emotive words grip the reader. The way you twisted together the two themes... marvelous! I've never thought of that, but it is a perfect idea! Unique and and colorful.
Your words flow well together, and the rhyming
is good too. Sometimes, looks can be deceiving:)).
These are strong lines:Your angel girl with gentle smile
And cheeks with perfect blush
You write my style. I think this is great. I too am like you, I find the sad and dark feelings bring the words to me more effortlessly. I try to write all kinds of feelings, but I must admit, though odd it seems to others, I prefer the the sad and dark.
this one is indeed a very good one to read... It's a pleasure to read such a wonderful poem.. There isn't one or two lines that i liked the most .. your poem is so good that mentioning one or two lines out of it would be unfair to this poem...great work!!
hey thanks for your reviews :) this is really good. i can really relate to it. people have all sorts of images me, but not a single one is fully true. great choice of words. it makes you really feel it
this is really quite good. there are a few breaks in rhythm, but that's minor. what counts is that you've expressed yourself extremely well. i don't think any of us are what other people think we are.
Dear China Doll:
Great poem, and I love your last line. I must admit I am a little jealous of people who can write in prose. You are very talented. Can't wait to read more.
I only write occasionally when inspiration hits. Most my poems are downers because I find that, unfortunately, the sad emotions and experiences are easier to find the words for (as I show in "Elusive .. more..