Lost, not Confused

A poem written for a contest..

Birds sulk their way into their cobbled nests
The crimson sky says, “My job’s done”
Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore
Within a forest where fire’s burnt it all
Answers which only you can provide
Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.

© Nothing Personal. January 16, 2011.

Author's Note

I've been writing a lot of short poetry which I haven't yet published..This one's on a prompt for Lost and confused feelings..

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I guess I am confused, cause I didn't see what the others did. I am really confused by the word - ancience...... what does this mean or did you mean? Although I did like the lines " Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me"

It shows a playful side to your memories, and of happier times.

[Holly O'Brien]

hmmm...it seems so lonely and quiet...the atmosphere that your words have created. I like how you just wrote your words without thinking too much. One can see your subconscious trying to be heard. love it!

[nancy.sedky]

the best thing when you read something and find it familiar or touches something in you,thank you for this piece:) keep it up

[Moflo]

This was a very powerful piece. I loved your imagery, it really helped to form a sense of optimism that makes the reader come away with inspiration. Very nice descriptions. Great poem.