Lost, not Confused

A poem written for a contest..

Birds sulk their way into their cobbled nests
The crimson sky says, “My job’s done”
Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore
Within a forest where fire’s burnt it all
Answers which only you can provide
Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.

© Nothing Personal. January 16, 2011.

Author's Note

I've been writing a lot of short poetry which I haven't yet published..This one's on a prompt for Lost and confused feelings..

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I guess I am confused, cause I didn't see what the others did. I am really confused by the word - ancience...... what does this mean or did you mean? Although I did like the lines " Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me"

It shows a playful side to your memories, and of happier times.

[luciddreamer]

The name fits perfectly with the writing....good job :)

Peace
Robin

[George Love]

Nicely done.

[SilentLullabies]

I like the fact that it's short and not too drawn out. Sometimes long poems can get very boring.

[E.H. Monroe]

This was the rapid fire all elemental all senses filled poem, mixed with some hardcore intelligence and pure age wisdom.
The idea of almost a mentor, doing it all and understands it all but gives everything up in long winded metaphor.

That's what I got anyway.

Nice work

[SarahCortland]

yes it is short but it is still great good job

[OT]

nice descriptions as always, and very well written, your short poetry is as good as your longer pieces!! nice NP!!

[AlisshalovesBrandon]

That is how i usually feel. you nailed it perfectly.

[Poetic Beauty]

I like this poem. the description is quite vivid. It allows me to picture the red color in my minds.

[Lilly Negoi]

melancholia dripping from each line...i like the way the poem curves down firstly, towards "Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience" and then rises towards the last lines...

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Interesting..!!!