Lost, not Confused

A poem written for a contest..

Birds sulk their way into their cobbled nests
The crimson sky says, “My job’s done”
Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore
Within a forest where fire’s burnt it all
Answers which only you can provide
Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.

© Nothing Personal. January 16, 2011.

Author's Note

I've been writing a lot of short poetry which I haven't yet published..This one's on a prompt for Lost and confused feelings..

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I guess I am confused, cause I didn't see what the others did. I am really confused by the word - ancience...... what does this mean or did you mean? Although I did like the lines " Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me"

It shows a playful side to your memories, and of happier times.

[Siddhartha]

A mesmerizing and sensual piece of work...A short poetry ought to be as cathartic as possible...This one is...A call to publish all of your short poetry? I bet it is...And we are all waiting...

[Victoria Kay]

Very nice imagery.

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is great, i love the title. i think that is what made me want to read it.... and the poem itself is awesome!

[Emily B]

I like short poetry best sometimes

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enchanting..there is alot of controlled emotion here..nice write

[trainwreck]

Nice. The imagery seems a little underdeveloped. Either that, or you were trying to leave a lot up to the readers' imagination. Still, its a rather good poem, as expected.

[Alicia Schroeder]

Beautiful!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was wonderful, it was very romantic! Gave me a wondeful feeling, pleasurable read!

[KAREN]

Beautiful piece and imagery!
I'll wait till the next morning
wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.
DEEP!!

[G. K. Bostic]

This is a great write for the prompt......you used great description to show the confusion....I really like this.