Lost, not Confused

A poem written for a contest..

Birds sulk their way into their cobbled nests
The crimson sky says, “My job’s done”
Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore
Within a forest where fire’s burnt it all
Answers which only you can provide
Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.

© Nothing Personal. January 16, 2011.

Author's Note

I've been writing a lot of short poetry which I haven't yet published..This one's on a prompt for Lost and confused feelings..

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I guess I am confused, cause I didn't see what the others did. I am really confused by the word - ancience...... what does this mean or did you mean? Although I did like the lines " Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me"

It shows a playful side to your memories, and of happier times.

[Calypso]

Beautiful. Very nice love poem.

[Nida Lodi]

purgative lines...wept in the gray rain,played tic-tac-toe...nicely written:)

[roarke]

I'm confused AND lost. Feelings are hard to fathom from any frame work. They're the hardest to portray, especially in poetry. What seems an easy task, upon reflection becomes lost and that's where the original confusion about the feelings began.

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This is brilliant~lovely~

[Hello, Goodbye]

the narration and concept is curiously delightful

[Coyote Poetry]

"Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore"
I like the language and story in the poem. Easy to fall. Hard to get up. But we must. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dushyant Thadani]

This completely answers the question I asked in my previous work. It is interesting and was a great read.

[Brianna Brie]

Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me

I like the verses above for they show a connection.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I’ve been there, not knowing what direction to take but aware of my surrounding. Great job.