Lost, not Confused

A poem written for a contest..

Birds sulk their way into their cobbled nests
The crimson sky says, “My job’s done”
Ancient ruins amongst me and I among dilapidated ancience
Lost in a sea without a shore
Within a forest where fire’s burnt it all
Answers which only you can provide
Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun
The one
That will rise with you.

© Nothing Personal. January 16, 2011.

Author's Note

I've been writing a lot of short poetry which I haven't yet published..This one's on a prompt for Lost and confused feelings..

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I guess I am confused, cause I didn't see what the others did. I am really confused by the word - ancience...... what does this mean or did you mean? Although I did like the lines " Because you slept under the blue sky
Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me"

It shows a playful side to your memories, and of happier times.

[dukovan]

you played tic-tac toe with me, could be the most powerful line here, it sounds pretty personal for nothing personal, *several bad puns later*....

[Keevan]

I really liked this. I can't think of any other words to put it. Nicely done. ^^

This is very good. Well written. The imagery pushes the feeling of being lost or lonely to me. I particularly like the form. You started rather 'complex' with your imagery and ended very simple.

[Loner]

Liked it ...... beautifully portrayed.

[Sunflower 20]

I think the fact that this poem isn't clear makes it all the more interesting. Plus the flow was wonderful, nice job

[Kimberly]

This was a good poem. Nicely written.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When life seems out of synch you need to stop take a deep breath and go over the facts till they make sense...

Wept in the gray rain
And played tic-tac toe with me
I’ll wait till the next morning
Wait for the next sun

great usage or words.

[Amy]

I kinda liked this althogh I didn't realy understand it at all and it left me quite confused but I lie the way it flows so over all I liked it

[Richard Williams]

The two things that stand out are the birds sulking into their "cobbled nests" and the tic-tac toe reference. An interesting little poem.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Nice. I bet you won the contest :D
A relief from your harsher poetry ... like a soft, sad drizzle between tempests.