Healing Scars

In a day..

Scars
Scratches on open wounds which can never heal
An unexpected sight leading to an unprepared call
Distances between successive metro stations suddenly large
Impenetrable coffee shops
Unknown people whistle past
An occasional beautiful girl
A known face in an unknown shoe shop
What are the odds?
Apparent ageing
A dingy book shop hidden beneath the basement of a glamorous hotel
Rich with metaphors
And lots to steal from
And enough for a night to forget.

Heal
Unknown pastry shops offer a surprise magical coffee
Assurance of unbought cakes
Nuances of a known man in a sea of unknowns
Shy doctors with deeper issues and selective promises
Rare but common father-son moments
Over a known city, unknown emotions
Translations , better ones in thin wafery books
A phone call desired but never rang
A phone call not desired but somewhat half expected
Also never rang
Old photo albums with overtly defensive captions
Never meaning a damn thing.
Blatant show off, Words of unworthy praise for friend foes
Poems to seal it off
Porn to finally forget.

© Nothing Personal. January 12, 2011.

Reviews

[Meghan Rose]

this has a lovely contrast between scarring and healing, and the imagery placed me in the position of someone trying to get over a relationship or something along those lines. it evokes very well how one is continually haunted by these scars until we start to do something about them. well done.

[trainwreck]

This one seems so reflective, its a little hard to catch all the deeper meaning and nuances. I did enjoy it though. You're writing strikes me as hopeless, but not black, as though you are painting a picture in shades of gray. Its a great style and I'm glad I get to read it, because you are very good at it.

[Jeffrey Gershom]

I agree with the reviewers who like the unique way you framed your work in two different parts. Then pairing the different lines of each section together. It kind of reminded me of a grocery list, but with style, and I'm not a person who normally enjoys reading them either. lol
I really liked your poem. It made me think of times strolling through a big city where so many things are present...the good and the bad.
Thanks for sharing.
-Jeffrey

[Sunflower 20]

I agree with everyone else here, the imagery was wonderful. I think a great writer is one that can take you on a journey through nothing more than words. And thats exactly what you've done here.

Well done! :)

[Stacey]

Very clever and creative in how you titled, then broke down the structure in to two parts...the scar, the healing. Then paired the two in a way that makes sense with one another. The last two lines put a really nice bow on this prize of a write. Wonderfully executed and a joy to read!

[KAREN]

I traveled to all these places as I read! The flow was great and so is the poem!

[Just Cat]

I like this alot. It's an interesting journey through physical and mental scars, both personal and regarding society. That's how I saw it, not if that's a too deep though lol.
Well done, keep it up :)

[akapr17other]

Really cool idea. I liked this a lot

[Jazmine T]

clever concept ...beautifully excuted..

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

With your excellent imagery you took me on a journey in this poem! awesome write!