Alone

One of my darker poems??

Before you wake up again,
I will take that walk to the river
The meadow
And the dark, promising woods.
Alone.

Before you wake up again,
I will put green leaves
Mix it with black cloves
And boil water
Sip my morning tea
Alone.

Before you wake up again,
I will hide in my closet
And write a bleak poem
Undisturbed
Alone.

Before you wake up again,
I will sleep with open eyes
And close my eyes for ever awakening
Narcissistic dreams and sadomasochism
Alone.

Before you wake up again,
I will add little, white pills
In your glass of water
Beside your head
And stir them until
I see clarity, undistinguished
Alone.

When you wake up,
I won't come to see
Your messed up self
Your potent, sweet morning smile
Your fragrance that would fill the room
Because
You will be Alone.

When you wake up,
I won't be able to hear your sweet voice
Calling my name
Seeking my broad shoulders and reliable arms
For comfort and other things
Because
You will be Alone.

When you wake up,
I won't see when you pick up the dreaded glass
And sip away or gulp
Engulf
In all the morning water
Because
You will be Alone.

You will be Alone
When the sunlight would dim
The curtains would close by themselves
The room will swirl in rages
Hey, tempestuous storm.

You will be Alone
When moaning cries would emanate
And raging shouts
And agonizing pain
Untold.

You will be Alone
When love will be still unfound
Appalling surprise
And eyes stare with bewilderment
How?

You will be Alone
With the last silent tear
Which will befall on the last unmade bed
Where love wasn't made last night
Still Warm.

You will be alone
In that grave
Improperly dug
Unceremoniously homaged
Hideously Obscured
Nowhere.

You will be alone
When your beloved cat will sniff
Over the ground and overgrown grass
Beneath which lies
But You.

While I would be laughing like a devil
With someone just like you
Somewhere just so far
From you.
It's me, after all.

© Nothing Personal. January 11, 2011.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading :-) :-)

P:S I am becoming increasingly format obsessed. let me know if you find the format or the repetitive scheme any good? I appreciate your comments. And thanks to EH Monroe for putting me in cat vomit. I was reborn.

Reviews

[Method To The Madness]

Really enjoyed it but maybe you could have broken out of the format just a teensy bit.
Just for emphasis I mean.
don't force the format or add new lines that don't really work just to keep the repetative scheme going.
but I still liked reading it.
:)

[Ice QueenJen]

I think the format was great, and how you turned the tables from you being alone to the other person being alone and under the ground. Great writing too!

This is pretty good. Your format holds true for the first nine stanzas and sets a good pace. Even the slight change in repetition works here. You kinda lose it in the tenth stanza imo. Almost like you started a new poem. ? For me, I liked it up to that point. The change in pattern and flow broke the spell of the poem for me.

[Dakota]

The repetition adds to it in my opinion. Dark can be a good thing in cases like this. The mystery of a whodunit without the endless pages of fillers. I love it! :o)

[Kimberly]

I can't remark on format. I'm a prose writer and formating has a different meaning to us. Otherwise this was a great poem about death (either of the person or the relationship) and I liked it.

[floarealbastra10]

wow , I enjoyed the poem very much, good job

[Richard Williams]

A good write, powerfully engaging.

[Siddhartha]

Wonderful write!who cares about what format...the poem's great and that alone matters...write in as many formats as you can my friend...the more formats you're in love with the merrier...:)

[trainwreck]

Good write. Yes it is dark, but pleasently so. Its all good to have a set format. Also, having a signature format is really enjoyable, as long as you are capable of writing in a different format.

[roarke]

hmm. Where ever you go, there you are, awake or asleep, alive or dead....
alone in a crowd, a crowd of people just like you...

this is haunting to say the least. The first stanza is killer. The last stanza a sucker punch.

format should be self-suggested, not premeditated.
Yep, haunting.

[Just Cat]

Oooooh, wow. I love it. I love everything about it. The darkness, the mystery, the repetition just adds drama and... it's great! Very well done! :D