A Discourse- Death, Existence and Forever Life

My take on Death and Living

Plan

So what if
I don't want to die?
Existence as we know of
Is utter, complete, so satisfied.
I have a solution
Bring your ears close by
Let me whisper.

Discourse - I

I love to live
I never want to die
People who believe in god
Can live their lives
On promised Heavens for which they strive
Or Hell if they utterly fail but still survive
I don't believe in God
I have no rationale
To believe in the Lord
And to top it all,
Science infected my brain
To make me think
Death, the complete darkness
Death, the supreme consciousness
Before the utter end
Death, the Non-existence.

Lines to read when I'm not there - I

"I write this poem
For you to read
To remember a soul
Which wanted to live
Always and forever
Enjoy the spring and breathe the air
Write, Eat and Make love
Learn, Drink and Inspire"

Discourse - II

The ruthless told me
There's nothing to live
For Death brings meaning
To the Life we live.
Without Death, Time will stop
There won't be anything and that will be all
I tell them with utmost grace
I still want to live at a snail's pace.

Lines to read when I'm not there - II

"Even if I'm not there
Even if I'm just a few lines
Some old memories
And a photo in a dilapidated frame
These lines will remain
And I will live through these lines
Read them to your sons and friends
And tell them - The Man who didn't want to die"

Execution

I know I am ninety
I am really ill
My time has come
I will be free
I have a plan
I conceived when I was a child
Please execute it
Before I die.

Find a patient
A life which still lives
But the brain has died.
Operate and take my brain
In its entirety and fill his crane.
As he will open his eyes
I will live again and I won't die.

He will think like me
He has all my memories
He will find a changed body
But a life so full
And the best part is
I will give his lifeless body
A whole new life
But it will be not be him
Who lives with my brain
It is me who will take the reign.
(Laughs silently with a forever expression)

© Nothing Personal. January 09, 2011.

Author's Note

I want to change the title. Any suggestions?

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

Actually I think the title fits very well! What a profound write on the essence of life and death. A common saying on headstones in New England was (back 100-200 years ago) As you are now, so once was I; as I am now, one day you'll be. Morbid yes...but truth...we are all worms food. Great write!

[Greg Skura]

One life many forms! Life we must embrace with every breath for all too soon we will embrace our death. Great work!

[TamiViolet]

Death is such a complex part of life, and most of us can become overwhelmed if we think about it too much. A brain transplant...wow...that's something to think about... But as you say, 'it will not be him'... My belief is that we attain a higher level of consciousness where our outer being doesn't matter anymore...Thus, we become free, in a sense.

The format is cleverly executed, and your depth of character really shines through... Conclusion is exceptional.

[Launa'sWrite]

Yes, the format IS great: (lines to read when im not there, the plan, execution), like a story or a play within the poem, love it! It flows well.. moves forward at a good pace. hehe science infected my brain..
Nice build up ... builds suspense in the reader...
The title seems fine to me... but if i had to suggest something, it would be either just Discourse or Disscourse... because it is sorta not accepting death and as such dissing a natural course if you will... or have you planned for your death?

[SpokenWord]

I wonder how much a brain transplant will cost in the future. Not really sure I want to live forever dying has it's benefits. I do like the story format and how you broke it into sections showing and then supporting. Great work.

[SarahCortland]

I haven't ever seen anything like this and maybe you should call it "so what" almost as stating opinion is opinion though I'm sure you can come up with something better either way wow great job

[Sarah McConnaughey]

It would be nice if we could CHOOSE to live forever because I would choose to never die. This is really great and I like how you broke it down into sections which made it sort of like a story in a poem. Well done.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I smell such a hint of new age philosophy.
You thoughts inspire spider webs of other thoughts.
Beautiful work...spoken with the kindest words.

[Sarusai Hiryu]

Novel form.
I especially liked the way you brought out the quintessentially human desire to grasp at life, at remembrance in this world at whatever price.
One line I found obscure: Just what do you mean by a "Forever expression"?

[HopelesslyDevoted]

the breaking up of the poem into sections is very interesting and it gives emphasis to certain parts, it makes it more powerful! fantastic!

[Loner]

Real philosophical poem friend , great work.
How about : A FOREVER EXPRESSION, NEVER WANT TOO DIE.