Addicted

So what am I addicted to?

Seeds of death, sown in each soul
In the baby, the young , the very old
Walk past the streets , do your daily task
Can you all feel, life, flowing past?

Life revolves mundane , three storied offices
In absence of love, Lucy's are paid
Can purchased breasts , synthetic kisses feel same
O what will I do now, My life's in vain.

Why haven't I, taken a tour of the world?
Read all those books, Watched all those slides
Treasured all those girls, who wanted to be mine
Looked at expensive mirrors, praised when I had time.

I have an illness , strange and wise
Medicine unprescribed , doctors denied
Compare a lightning flash to dim candlelight
Addicted to life, I don't want to die.



© Nothing Personal. January 03, 2011.

Author's Note

Hair of the Dog Prompt - Tap # 1

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

(I thought I reviewed this before...but maybe I just read it...) It was good for a second read...I love what you do anyway, so it's no surprise! Great work, I especially liked:
"Can purchased breasts , synthetic kisses feel same"
and
"I have an illness , strange and wise
Medicine unprescribed , doctors denied
Compare a lightning flash to dim candlelight
Addicted to life, I don't want to die"

[Ice QueenJen]

I found this an interesting read, and I had just thought about the line ""Can purchased breasts , synthetic kisses feel same" and wondered why someone would want something fake inside them? Like fake breasts and lips injected with something dead, that could cause damage to your body.
then you talk about having an illness, strange and wise- I have an illness and it has a mind of its own since I can do nothing about it but I am just given pills to manage my illness. And yes like you I am addicted to being alive, but have almost died 6 times so far yet keep plugging on!

[Amy]

I like teh stile/way that this is written and the way that it flows together.

[trainwreck]

Very nice. I love how you use your poetry to reflect upon something, as opposed to reliving it. Its a different general style. This one really draws the reader in, and since I'm a girl, I felt for all those girls. Again, good job with this.

[Sunflower 20]

great job, although i'm not surprised. i've come to expect great writing from you :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

Life trials come in many forms.
Excellent write.

[.]

life is sooo addictive..just come back though and do it again!

[Launa'sWrite]

Nice climactic ending! you're very good at getting to the point in your poems.. not too wordy.. very clear, get to point efficiently. the last stanza is the only one that doesnt rhyme the third and the 4 th line.. i wonder if you consciously chose that.. ? It sounds good nonetheless..

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a very creative way to write about an addiction. I have never heard of being addicted to life but it is a strong wise and true statement. This captured my attention from the first line and continued till the end. Unique and amazing.

[Kita Tataki (Emily Conn..]

Oh wow, you've done it again. A truly magical piece or writing this one is... the very first line, starting off with a mysterious riddle-y tone really set the mood for this poem. I really enjoy reading your poetry; you're a fantastic writer!!