Invisible

You know what they like
You know what they want,
You know what they do
But they don't know you.

You know what it takes
You know how to make,
You know whom to fool
But life still eludes you.

You still dream of lights
You still believe in lies,
You still ooze with hope
But they don't care anymore.

You can run away
They can stay far away,
But the truth still remains true
You and them shall meet soon.

© Nothing Personal. October 21, 2010.

 

Reviews

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This comes across to me as a piece about manipulation, specificaly the kind that occurs online. Yet, the last stanza takes away from that idea and leads me to think more realworld. I'm not sure really... It's a deep poem for me and could be symbolizing a great many things. In a way it's almost like two opposing forces that had used eachother and are now on a course towards mutual revenge. It's nicely formated and flows well though! xD

Hugs! - Ash

[Adelia Alighieri]

It's like I'm speaking to myself.
I liked this, well done.

[Dream Slave]

First stanza, made it sound like a person outside of the in crowd wanting to get in but can't because no one in the crowd knows him. Second one, about how this person starts to become part of this crowd of people by doing what he has to do no matter what to gain a social place but can't seem to find it. Third, he thinks that he is there at the place he wanted to reach but in reality there is just a false pedestal and these group grow tired until at last instead of acceptance he will get prosecuted by the same people who he thought he knew and wanted to be a part of.

[Budd Black]

I think the last line should read you and they.
It comes across to me as a person growing up and away from their parents. Meeting soon at the end means that the child will have grown up, but I am probably wrong

[Bard Constantine]

A thought-provoking piece, makes me think of doubts, fears... the inner demons that plague us at our weakest moments. The purposeful omission of the 'they' in question allows the reader to draw their own conclusion, which I always admire in a writer...

[Nobody.]

Interesting. I am bothered by the 'They' in question.....scares me a bit.

powerful piece.
cheers!

[Dark Empress]

Very good, creepy, spooky, and an awesome poem

[Goodbye]

Very well constructed, paranoidish-spookyish poem!

Very good! Sent a shiver up my spine!

[Ice QueenJen]

very good NP!

[MuSe Ampoule]

One thing's for certain. You can write. Great job! It felt very assertive.

[RLT's Heart]

Wow! this really spoke to me. I can really relate to this.