Coffee Shots

I just realized something

I am covered in human skin

Hows that for a revalation?  

Here's an overdose basket case

Of coffee and vanilla chai

I am shaking brittly 

But I cant tell if it's the caffeine

Or lack of sleep

A single-tasking space-gazer

Because empty corners are more interesting

Author's Note

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Reviews

[(☞ﾟヮﾟ)☞Emmett..]

Wow, this is really good. Very funny in a way too. The problem is, it feels incomplete. I think there's more that you should add. The narrator sounds so paranoid and timid, I love it. And I love coffee too, I never saw it as 'shots' before, but I guess coffee can make someone jittery by overdosing. I'll definitely check out the website. :D

[Seshat Nidaba]

Witty, I'm going to your blog, immediately.

[Kim]

I just loved your first three lines, This is so wonderful. Awesome write!

[V]

like this one. i like those kind of detailed descriptions of stuff anyway. though the meaning or whatever is tricky to guess...;)

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

A succinct and delightfully charming write - there is a bit of the jitters and some loneliness and/or boredom from the notion of staring into corners...great write Nostrovia - keep em coming!
Light,
SiddARTha

[behind.the.lights]

Sounds familiar. Coffee is such a sweet addiction. I absolutely adore how light-heartedly weighted this is. The speaker's slightly spazzy train of thought makes the last line have a much greater impact. I do feel like its frennzied but calm feel makes this poem. Usually I don't like things that appear simple because I read into them too much, but I loved the quirky nature of this! Great work :)

[piggy]

This is very funny. Thank you for writing it.

[K.]

I like that this is short, sweet, and to the point.
I'm impressed by how quickly and easily the message is put across.
I don't think you should add to it, it would distract from the simplicity that makes it an enjoyable read.
nicely done