Love

i wrote this after i talked with my girl

Laying here,

Seeing what has yet to be noticed

This young girl,

Who has grown into a beautiful woman,

Trapped by her need to be perfect

Trapped by her need to prove her self

She never will know that she makes me happy

Every time she looks at me,

Every time she touches me

Every time she kiss’s me,

With all the things she does to me

The best one of them all is

The way you love me

So all I can do for you my love

Is take your hand without fear

Without hate, just the two of us

We will for sure make it

Some say we wont but

God says we will

Reviews

[Nicole]

For the most part I liked it, but I thought it strange when it changed from 'her' to 'you.'

[sisyqueen2008]

Aww, this is soo sweet! Any feelings of inadequacy your girl's feeling have surely been washed away if you've shown this to her! :) Great write.

[Just Plain Me]

I love the poem hun...thanks. :]
And it's really good. It makes me smile. haha