There's milk swimming in my Cheerios

Just a little poem for fun

There's milk swimming in my Cheerios

and a bed laying on my back

There's a sky hanging from the moon

and on a clear night you can see the dark

Time is staring at the clock

and your reflection is in the mirror

There's grief hiding in our happiness

and laughter coming from our tears

which fall

when we laugh

in our grief

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

smiled right from the very first line ... well done Norma :)

[John Sullivan]

A wonderful collection of inversions. Great work

[NormaZ]

Thanks John!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the contradictions of the expected here.
briliant piece of writing...smiling through the tears...and having to use a kerchief to wipe away the smiles.
j.

[NormaZ]

Thanks for your review Jacob!

[Thomas W Case]

Brilliant work. You paint the scene perfectly.

[NormaZ]

Thanks for stopping by and reading my poem!

[John the Baptist]

Rather somber, this one. From couplet two onward, the images are dark. "Time is staring at the clock/and your reflection is in the mirror". The rest of the poem deals with the interplay of laughter and grief. One question bothers me at the end: Isn't it "Cheerios?"

[NormaZ]

It is indeed Cheerios! I knew that looked wrong. Thanks for stopping by and reading my poem!

[NormaZ]

Luckily I found the edit function!

[Davidgeo]

I like how you flipped things here, it makes us think of obvious things in a different way. Well done Norma. I really like this one.

[NormaZ]

Thanks! It was fun to write.